Damn. I was nowhere ready for those feels. I mean, I figured with the drugs and everything they wouldn't be in love in love, but...'I'm straight'. That's just bullshit. Ugh. People fucking suck. But as much as I tried, I also couldn't find it in me to get mad at Asher, just like Hunter didn't. Something about the asshole is attractive in a sense. It's pissing me off. I DON'T WANNA LIKE YOU. FUCK OFF.
I absolutely loved your style with this one. The life, the relationship, and then the writing were all disjointed and disconnected and it flowed (or didn't flow haha) because it all connected and made sense. The thoughts didn't contrast with the style which is great. I was super excited to see sequels which I am totally going to go read in a minute after I make your blogs and stuff. It's just kind of an honest story, truly. Like something like this could actually happen; things like this do actually happen. Nothing's romanticized, which is something I loathe seeing in stories.
And for such short chapters, and technically only being from one 'point of view', there is a shit ton of character development. I can feel how desperate, but resigned, Hunter is. He accepts that he doesn't have Asher's love and probably never will, yet he still yearns for it. And then there's Asher. Blunt. Brutal. But still a person, not some emotionless lump of meat and bones.
The scenery is quite gorgeous as well. I think my favorite line is "Until I realize it's the cute guy with the tattoos and the plugs and I can't find my voice. " because I can just feel it; it's like I'm in that moment too. The slight sadness but overall I-don't-give-a-fuck-attitude in Hunter is just like wow. It hits you like a ton of bricks.
I like that he doesn't openly regret it, or complain about the lifestyle. It's not some character who got involved in something that they eventually couldn't handle and then whined about how stuck in the life they feel. Hunter might wish that Asher loved him, but that's negligible to the great high life he's living. It doesn't complain about needing to be saved from this terrible terrible life that he blatantly signed up for.
The emotion is blunt, like in the second part "I was scared.". And I appreciate it because it's just so honest, like, he doesn't look at Hunter as this magic God or anything that's there to make his life perfect. He knows exactly what's going on and although it's fun, it frightens him a little bit. Like a normal goddamn human reaction. What I really, really appreciate is how human they all are, but still different. Your characters all have a distinct style in how you write them, just like no two people are the same. It just adds to the realism and relatability(that's a word) of the overall story.
It's blunt. It's not romanticized. And it's like freaking perfect, okay? Love this. And you.
I absolutely loved your style with this one. The life, the relationship, and then the writing were all disjointed and disconnected and it flowed (or didn't flow haha) because it all connected and made sense. The thoughts didn't contrast with the style which is great. I was super excited to see sequels which I am totally going to go read in a minute after I make your blogs and stuff. It's just kind of an honest story, truly. Like something like this could actually happen; things like this do actually happen. Nothing's romanticized, which is something I loathe seeing in stories.
And for such short chapters, and technically only being from one 'point of view', there is a shit ton of character development. I can feel how desperate, but resigned, Hunter is. He accepts that he doesn't have Asher's love and probably never will, yet he still yearns for it. And then there's Asher. Blunt. Brutal. But still a person, not some emotionless lump of meat and bones.
The scenery is quite gorgeous as well. I think my favorite line is "Until I realize it's the cute guy with the tattoos and the plugs and I can't find my voice. " because I can just feel it; it's like I'm in that moment too. The slight sadness but overall I-don't-give-a-fuck-attitude in Hunter is just like wow. It hits you like a ton of bricks.
I like that he doesn't openly regret it, or complain about the lifestyle. It's not some character who got involved in something that they eventually couldn't handle and then whined about how stuck in the life they feel. Hunter might wish that Asher loved him, but that's negligible to the great high life he's living. It doesn't complain about needing to be saved from this terrible terrible life that he blatantly signed up for.
The emotion is blunt, like in the second part "I was scared.". And I appreciate it because it's just so honest, like, he doesn't look at Hunter as this magic God or anything that's there to make his life perfect. He knows exactly what's going on and although it's fun, it frightens him a little bit. Like a normal goddamn human reaction. What I really, really appreciate is how human they all are, but still different. Your characters all have a distinct style in how you write them, just like no two people are the same. It just adds to the realism and relatability(that's a word) of the overall story.
It's blunt. It's not romanticized. And it's like freaking perfect, okay? Love this. And you.