June 17th, 2014 at 06:02pm
So, whew. Taking a break from my lovely editor duties to return the comment swap!
So, let me start out with this: I very, very rarely read original fiction on here - and I even seldom enjoy that which I do.
That being said, I loved this story. Particularly, I love that it's in the males point of view. That's pretty rare to find around here and, while I was skeptical at first, I ended up really liking that you decided to do that. Very unique, for sure.
I really enjoyed reading this, and I busted through it in about an hour. I like the direction that this is taking, and I have a couple theories to how this story will end... Though, I hope I'm wrong on the most-likely one. I'll just keep those to myself for now, though... hehe.
The juxtaposition between Wolfgangs father and the rest of the family creates a very intriguing element. I suspected him to find out about the two little starcrossed lovers every chapter and, while I'm glad that [for now] he remains in the dark, I shudder to think of what his reaction will be. It's only a matter of time before he figures it out or is told.
Personally, I think it's rather cute that he calls her "Six". That suitcase that his mother found... that was hers, I'm assuming. I can't help but wonder if that's foreshadowing of some sort.
I also adore Jürgen, the relationship he has with Six, and how he treats Wolfy. I'ma call 'em that, 'cause I am lazy don't wanna type out his whole name... Kudos for how you hinted way back that she had someone else slipping her food ;)
Overall, I really enjoyed this story and hope to see many more updates as soon as possible! Wonderful job.
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I really like how you start off the story with the girl being forced to the camps. I especially like all of your description. You really paint a picture of what the camps were like and such. I also really like how you started the first chapter with him putting his uniform on. I like how he actually doesn't want to be a part of the party. It makes it much more interesting. Your writing really flows well. Your description is great. And, best of all, it really shows that you did your research. (or maybe you just really know your stuff!)
Great job on this. Such a great idea for a story. :)