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  • Alex Moore.

    Alex Moore. (100)

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    No deleting it is not necessary. Its not THAT bad haha. Oh by the way. Could you comment on my story: 'when the going gets tough'. Comment swap isn't really working and I really want people to see and read that story. Keep writing!
    May 6th, 2014 at 10:18am
  • MissCindyrella

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    @ Alex Moore.
    Thank you so much! I am so glad that the love and playfulness comes out between the two of them. I really want to portray it as an intensely strong bond.

    As far as the layout, boy don't I know it. I just can't seem to find anyone willing to build one for me. Ha I know that is something that really needs to happen though. Do you think maybe I should just remove the layout as a whole until I find someone to make one? I don't want to turn people off just by the way it looks. That would be horrible!

    Again thanks a million for the comment. I hope you continue to read.(:
    May 6th, 2014 at 09:00am
  • Alex Moore.

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    Yeey, first comment (eventhough it comment swap)
    I was kept interested fromt the first few sentences, but the background and the red lay-out made it hard to read. If that is made a bit calmer, it would certainly increase the readers pleasure.

    The interaction between Jasper and Jasmine is very fun to read, like the note Jasper left her. Nice to keep the readers guessing at the end of the chapter!
    May 5th, 2014 at 02:45pm