I'll Pick You Up Off the Ground - Comments

@ safe bet.
Wow, honestly, I love you so much for this! I love comments like that because it can let me improve even more my writing style and I'm glad you liked it. I don't even know what to say I'm just really happy. It's great to know what people like and what they don't like. Thank you so much :)

I'm glad you're proud of this because it is super fab oh my gosh. It's such an interesting concept; telling the story of their lives and falling (haha) in love through a singular type of event, although the circumstance causes some aspects to change. One thing I didn't necessarily like is that it seemed to have a constant 'us against the world' vibe, even when they were younger, because the only time another person was even mentioned was the break up. It's a little thing, minor detail, but it just felt kind of out of place even though the story is meant to focus solely on the relationship, romantic and platonic, between Zack and Rian. Great pairing, by the way. It's cute. The time and the structure that causes within your story is very well constructed, so props to you. Overall it was a cute, sweet little romance and you did a very nice job writing it.