Memories From a Dead Girl - Comments

  • Fuck You Mibba!

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    ...third story comment as promised... tehe

    It’s very interesting to read a story from a ghost’s point of view. The title and the blog itself are two elements of reading curiosity. The plot of this story is very intriguing because in the first chapter it seems Austin was the one who killed her, but after the chapters go on, I seriously think something not necessary natural made him do it or maybe she did it herself like he suggested.

    The connection that Chloe and Olivia shared is obviously special, and I liked the element in which Olivia, as a ghost, could make things move, possess Austin and even show Chloe settings she needed to see in order to understand.

    Smart thing to incorporate the game of Ouija in the story since it makes perfect sense they want to make sure she is still there after Chloe said many times she could feel her. I seriously thought that Austin was being possessed himself when he killed her. I wasn’t expecting everything to be an accident. It was a great story that at the end got a little confusing but at least it gave the reader closure and a resolution to the plot.

    The layout fits perfectly well and there was little to no grammar and spelling mistakes. Each word connected very well, and the use of vivid imagery was shown throughout each chapter.

    Overall, this is a great story and I really liked it.
    November 9th, 2016 at 12:36am
  • permanentdeclaration

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    I absolutely LOVED this story! I'm off to read the a sequel now! Mr. Green
    August 11th, 2014 at 04:59am
  • Dom.

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    This ending though <3 It gave me chills.

    This was an amazing story! I loved loved loved it!
    August 5th, 2014 at 01:52am
  • tezza

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    Goosebumps. So. Much. Goosebumps.
    August 1st, 2014 at 10:39am
  • A S K I N G .

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    Don't get discouraged, this is mind blowing and so suspenseful. I love the short chapters, you always leave me on my toes. And even if you might have scooted some chairs you didn't plan to, I know you can work it in to just MAKE MY BRAIN EXPLODE.
    I've been uneasy towards Chloe and Austin since the beginning, Chloe just seemed a bit crazy. And Austin was so. . . I was suspicious on if he was truthful or not. Now I think Chloe is still, maybe MORE, cray cray. SHE WAS WITH AUSTIN FOR A BIT! Mmm dat gurl, why she gotta do dat?
    And Austin is just evil, go away Austin. GO AWAY
    August 1st, 2014 at 07:18am
  • Ragdoll.

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    I'm still so lost! To be honest... from the beginning, I'd been wary of both Austin and Chloe. I'd assumed they had planned to kill her so they could 'be together'. But that was based on your Mibba mag article. When I started reading, I was on Chloe's side. She was genuinely surprised and hurt that Austin killed her sister. Of course, my views began to change when Austin passed the test and showed signs of missing her, and wanting to find her killer. Then at a point, I distrusted Chloe. Her lust towards Austin was such a different character to who we had seen previously. Now I'm just all out confused, haha! I don't know who I want to be truthful!
    July 31st, 2014 at 02:39am
  • Valerie.

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    Wow, a lot of chapters have been added since I left off. It’s been a while since I’ve read more of this story but it’s still as good as I remember, the magazine definitely chose a great story to review. I love the lengths of the chapters, seeing as I always find it hard to get through long bodies of text. Each chapter just pulls me in and they always leave me wanting more, I’m so eager to find out how this story is going to end. Cute

    (I noticed a couple of errors. Chloe's words came out in a whisper, but they was full of rage – (chapter 15) “was” should be “were”, and chapter twenty is in all italics instead of just the past.)
    July 29th, 2014 at 09:14pm
  • Dom.

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    Finally caught up! This keeps getting better and better!
    July 28th, 2014 at 06:32am
  • ninahx

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    I love this story. I noticed it in the Magazine, and read it trough at once. It's just great. I love the plot, the short chapters, the layout and everything about it. Please keep updating, your updates always make my day because I'm hooked! (:
    July 26th, 2014 at 08:35pm
  • DistressedDamsel

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    I'm really digging the short chapters actually. Its something different and the plot to this story is amazing. Could you update please? I'm really interested in this so far.
    July 26th, 2014 at 08:09pm
  • Ragdoll.

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    This story is quite interesting. I like the brief chapters, probably because it gives the story a more mysterious feel. You were right; it's really confusing throughout the entire thing, but that's okay because it also adds to the mystery. Questions are still left unanswered, mainly to do with her murder, Chloe's lust, and Austin's part in the death. I look forward to reading more!
    July 24th, 2014 at 04:50am
  • thacker1395

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    At first, it kind of bothered me that the chapters are so short. After I started reading though, I stopped caring. The story is very interesting, and it works. Great story. I love it.
    June 22nd, 2014 at 02:51am
  • thacker1395

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    At first, it kind of bothered me that the chapters are so short. After I started reading though, I stopped caring. The story is very interesting, and it works. Great story. I love it.
    June 22nd, 2014 at 02:50am
  • permanentdeclaration

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    You didn't force me to do anything. You seemed like you needed some reassurance that people were still reading, so that's what I did :)
    June 19th, 2014 at 04:43pm
  • BrittanyMorgan

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    I am still reading!!! Don't quit! I love the way the story is going, and I don't care how weird it gets. The only reason I'd stop reading is if you stopped updating! You are a fantastic writer! So, even if it's just for permanentdeclaration, domi823, and I, please continue!!
    June 18th, 2014 at 02:11am
  • permanentdeclaration

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    I am still reading this and would be devastated if you stopped updating. I hope you do continue this, if only for me and domi823 below me!
    June 18th, 2014 at 02:03am
  • Dom.

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    To answer your thought, I'm still reading ^_^ I do like where this is going just so you know. Kind of cool you're not giving the readers any answers. It makes your story more intriguing.
    June 17th, 2014 at 01:30am
  • Valerie.

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    I love this story Cute
    June 3rd, 2014 at 04:24pm
  • rosamarie

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    So I'll be honest... I really wasn't sure about this at first.. I usually don't go for stories that have such short chapters, but you make it work in your favor. Just the way you write drags people in, makes them want to know what's coming next, and I think the effect is heightened by the way you write the chapters, and the length you use. So while I was wary at first, great job! I probably just spent the last half hour reading this entire thing, honestly XD

    With some work, this could actually be a best-seller novel or something, actually... by a little work, I mean that you know... normal chapters in books are a bit longer xD I'm not trying to be a critic, I swear, but this is good, just so you know. And I am looking forward to an update to read. I definitely recommended this and subscribed! ^-^

    Love the title and layout by the way. I think seeing both of those made my curiosity spike enough for me to start reading this, as bad as that sounds... I do try to base books off plot and writing, but you've found my weakness. I love reading about death.

    Anyhow, before I talk myself to death, I'm going to leave!

    If you're interested, I'd love for you to try out my story -linked in my sig- I would love more readers if at all possible... I'm a fantasy writer, just so you know. My story is post-apocalyptic really... so far past, really, that humanity has reverted back to a medieval setting. Thanks for considering it, but just ignore this if you aren't interested!
    June 2nd, 2014 at 02:15am
  • BrittanyMorgan

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    Love this story! Subbed and recommended!! I'm looking forward to an update!!
    June 1st, 2014 at 10:33pm