Xious - Comments

@ discoveringclouds
Hi. I'm sorry to be getting back to your comment so late. Haven't been on Mibba as much as I use to.

Thank you so much! I had fun making it a while ago. The smile was actually suppose to be a high value mask in the kingdom that he stole. I had a feeling that it was something that had to be prized, but more unique to the kingdom that Valeriana and Queen Such-and-Such belonged to.

Thanks. I kinda had that realization when I put up the story. I have been keeping up in writing, though muse has been kind of a pain about it. Maybe, though, they said it was giving too much detail to scenes where I felt that I was lacking half the time. That that was it being too creative.

Yeah. It doesn't make a lot of sense. I couldn't understand it either and my parents got upset by it. My english teacher, however, loved it and was picking out the threads and actually taking apart the story. *shrugs* Don't know.

Thank you! And will try. ;)

It is a very interesting story. Beyond creative. In the realms of Alice in Wonderland, where the boundaries and the logic just aren't fixed.
What was that smile really? What does it represent?

I don't think it was right for your teachers to disregard your story that. You should keep writing. One thing though, to think about, perhaps they became uncomfortable with reading the intensity, passion and kissing scene? They are your teachers after all...

Also their point doesn't make that much sense because although you are creative there are some cliches here- like the bandit getting the heart of a princess archetype. So the story has a familiar idea.. So I don't see why they would shun it so harshly.

Keep writing.