My Danny - Comments

  • Meghan Miraculous

    Meghan Miraculous (100)

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    I adore this! So short and simple and pure.
    June 16th, 2014 at 06:18am
  • Alex Moore.

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    This story says a lot with limited words. I love that! And the way the chapters end in a similar way is a very smart move. Shifting between him and her, and that anticipation. You did a really good job. I always have trouble to say a lot with little amount of words but you did it beautifully. Keep this up!
    June 3rd, 2014 at 04:15pm
  • Valerie.

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    You’ve managed to give the reader a good insight into the relationship between Danny and Annie in only a matter of a couple hundred words which I think is great.

    When I’m nervous I do those exact same things Annie does and I thought you described those habits perfectly. I like the way the point of view changes each chapter and how obvious it is even without something like *Annie’s P.O.V* posted somewhere to indicate it. Also I love how you always end on the same note with one of them saying something about the other.

    This was an easy read, I find it hard to get through stories with long chapters so I like the fact the chapters in this are short. I have nothing to criticize, this story is great. Cute
    June 1st, 2014 at 07:14pm
  • Jordypye

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    Layout/Summary:
    I adore the layout, it's simple and nice, nothing flashy and I think it goes well with the summary as well! Simple but effective.

    Chapter One:
    First let me say that I love short chaptered stories because I have a short attention span Shifty Next can I just say that I love the point of view the reader is shown to begin with, we can see that he knows Annie really well because he can tell when she's nervous and her habits when she gets nervous, I love that, it's a really nice insight especially as an introduction to the story! Sorry I'm gushing Sorry

    Chapter Two:
    Ahh I like the change in point of view! That's a nice twist and it's also easy to tell that it's been swapped, good job! I'm really interested to see what happens next, I get the feeling Danny always pressures Annie into doing stuff she's unsure about but she loves Danny so she does it for him, at least that's the vibe I get.

    I'll be honest, I'm sad there isn't more to read! I seriously can't wait to read more! lmfao I'm recommending this and subscribing. Cute
    May 27th, 2014 at 04:16am