He Had the Biggest Smile - Comments

  • Famous Friend.

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    I absolute loved it!
    I love the way you describe things because I can just see them in my head and that's the best.
    You write beautifully.
    August 14th, 2014 at 01:36am
  • spektor

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    Oh sweet Jesus this is the sweetest thing I've read in my life. It had me awing the entire way through the first read.

    I absolutely love your descriptions.

    But we were small town people with small town lives and nothing extraordinary was ever going to happen to us. We were destined to finish school, get a job at the gas station and complain about the shitty pay until we quit, then rot in our graves. He blatantly ignored my pessimism and continued to dream.

    That really got to me. Wow that is a great line. It rings so true and I can personally relate to it. Plus, the word choice is great, concise and easily understood. There's power in your simplicity.

    His crow’s feet turned into proper laugh lines

    This put a picture in my head. It’s indirect characterization in a perfect example. I absolutely adore these characters you’ve created.

    Throughout the entire story there’s this cutesy flow and it makes me feel so warm on the inside. It’s concise and cohesive—which is one of my favorite things in a story.

    Oh and one more thing I really, really liked

    “I love you, too.” He’d say once he was finished and then he’d take the smoke out of my lips and throw it on the ground, stomping on it. He’d then kiss my acid lips and inhale my sour breath.

    Acid breath. Who thinks of that? What does it mean? That’s a beautiful line.
    Thank you for the comment swap, I absolutely loved this story and it’s definitely getting a rec. I’ll read the other story sometime tomorrow. And thank you for your comments on my story dear (:
    June 3rd, 2014 at 02:09am
  • saegusa.

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    First off the song. Secondhand Serenade = one of the best things to ever bless this world oh my goodness, I love him and whoa and wow this song is perfect.

    Now, the story. This is the most wonderful thing and I love it and it's so cute and perfect and and, "...and smile that infectious smile. Then I'd end up smiling and I'd forget about his optimism and horrible wardrobe choices." Oh my gosh. Help I'm flailing I can't even anymore, this is too cute. They're so adorable, the little shits and I love them and I want to read about them forever. This is perfection and I love how they work and Pinkie (as I dub him for the rest of this comment) is such a cutie with his optimism and his hair and smiles and he's so aww-worthy and I want to hug the little ray of sunshine. And then Narrator over here seems like the absolute opposite and it's perfect, they work so wonderfully.

    "That was what made us work. We’d fuck around and I’d be a dick and he’d be too attached and then we’d have a fall out." Exactly. They work. They're perfect. I love it. I love this. I'm gonna read this forever and ever. It's beautiful.

    and that gif is so amazing like w o w
    June 2nd, 2014 at 09:33pm
  • swell

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    fkn
    jesus dude
    i loved this so much
    it's like the kind of story you read over and over again because perfection has been achieved
    like there wasn't something i didn't like about this because i loved every single line
    what even
    so much inspiration
    you are greatness
    words cannot be formed properly
    why are you so great
    fuck
    June 2nd, 2014 at 03:15pm