That was adorable. I really love how you fit such a sweet plot into such a short story, but the one thing I disliked was how short it was. Short stories can be touching, but there's a certain point where the story becomes "Too short." I personally believe that sometimes shortening stories is beneficial, because it can leave the readers wanting more, and asking for a sequel. I thought this was really great, but I would have elaborated a little more and talked more about the birthday party, or something like that, just to give the story a bit more length. No matter though, I thought it was a fantastic story, and I should have a rating for you later today. One more pointer for you is, I honestly would like to see more of this. If you feel up to it, I think this story would be really popular if you continued it, talking about the pregnancy, how it affects Cam, and stuff like that... Anyway, thanks so much for your entry, I really appreciate it. I'll give you an update soon! :)
July 2nd, 2014 at 01:02am