I like the title of your story, especially how it relates to this character your are portraying. I like the style of jargon you use, your words create a strong imagery of a moth such as "fluttered", "flew", and "flitting". I also like how it is not clear whether this character is a person or is an actual moth, the ambiguity is well done and works with this drabble.
The descriptive nature of your writing is all round very strong. You make the character realistic as well as the setting. The structure is also really good, I like how you started with a short sentence then flow into this beautiful, drawn out description and then finish with another snappy sentence. It reads well which can be difficult to do.
The only issue I really have is that your story hasn't been properly paragraphed. It's all bunched together and I don't know if that's from transferring a story from a writing programme to Mibba, if it was accidental, or you forgot, but that's not really important when it comes to the quality of your writing.
I like the title of your story, especially how it relates to this character your are portraying. I like the style of jargon you use, your words create a strong imagery of a moth such as "fluttered", "flew", and "flitting". I also like how it is not clear whether this character is a person or is an actual moth, the ambiguity is well done and works with this drabble.
The descriptive nature of your writing is all round very strong. You make the character realistic as well as the setting. The structure is also really good, I like how you started with a short sentence then flow into this beautiful, drawn out description and then finish with another snappy sentence. It reads well which can be difficult to do.
The only issue I really have is that your story hasn't been properly paragraphed. It's all bunched together and I don't know if that's from transferring a story from a writing programme to Mibba, if it was accidental, or you forgot, but that's not really important when it comes to the quality of your writing.
Keep up your very good work!