The Impossible Children - Comments

Okay, so this story mashed up a whole load of fandoms (which was great) but for me the Summary was a little too long and held a lot of information for the reader to start off with before they've even delved into the story.

As for the story itself, I really think that it's a good plot and that your ideas with the aliens impregnating people is cool. I'm not huge with grammar, but I didn't come across anything that stopped me from reading or had me going back to re read things. The story line you have seems solid, but I would suggest perhaps flushing it out a little (adding in more description and character background) that's just my opinion though

That being said, I did really enjoy what I read and you've definately got something going here.

Definitely an interesting story. With a mash up of so many fandom, I thought this would be a mess, but I think you pulled it off really well.

I liked the summary pretty well, with the exception of the parentheticals. I think it messed with the flow a bit; it might have been better to add that info at the bottom of the actual summary instead.

Chapter 1: I can honestly see why the other medical professionals are a bit skeptical of Dr. Samuels. He seems like a quack! Even when not considering his beliefs/interest in the paranormal/extraterrestrial. i feel like how he talks and explains things makes it look like he has very little idea of what he's doing, but I think it works well for this story.

Chapter 2: Even if Dr. Samuels isn't an actual lunatic, he's certainly in the wrong field. I feel like a 'real doctor would never come to a patient so quickly with such an outrageous idea! Alien baby?! It would probably be easier for Kurt and his colleagues to believe and explain an actual human male pregnancy than an alien impregnation. I did wonder why the doctors didn't explore Kurt's pregnancy as a normal one, considering that he was misgendered at birth or born with both male and female reproductive organs. Maybe Dr. Samuels managed to get a job at that medical center because they're all kind of incompetent. Burt seems to be the sanest one in the room!

Chapter 3: Ah! They're going to surgery just like that! That's crazy! Why wouldn't they call in someone else for a second opinion?! I feel like this would be a big deal and no doctor/hospital would just slip into surgery/removing it without having called in other people. I thought that was really strange; I mean, the entire thing is strange but even considering suspension of disbelief, I thought that seemed a bit off. I think it might have been a little more believable if there was a bit of medical flurry going on, at least within the hospital, of doctors and surgeons coming in to see what was going on.



So far, this seems like a really interesting story. I'd definitely keep reading to see how it goes and what becomes of this alien-pregnancy. Despite some of the less believable parts, I think it's a really great idea and you're going about it really well. I like that you're taking the time to focus on Kurt and the doctors figuring things out - rather than quickly moving on to another portion of the story - and I think seeing more of how Kurt deals with this will be great.

Summary:
The summary was so confusing. Honestly with the influx of characters introduced in the summary alone I was a little turned off from the story simply because of the fact that some people might not know who these characters are and being introduced to that many in one go can make people hesitant, especially if you introduce said characters in the summary.

Chapter One:
While I do like the beginning, I wish there would've been more information given on Kurt. Everything was kind of jumped into with no warning, and with a story like this, some character development needs to happen, otherwise everything is just jumbled.
I was actually really surprised that it took Dr. Samuels so long to figure out that he needed to take a look inside Kurt. Usually that's the doctors' first thought, so I was in disbelief when it took him that long to think it up.
I do like Kurt's reaction when he finds out. The disbelief and horror that he must feel is pretty realistic to what a man would probably feel if he found out he was pregnant.

I do like what you have thus far, but the influx of characters and everything makes this really hard for me, personally, to get into. I didn't see any mistakes regarding grammar or spelling which was really nice to see.

Good luck with this!

I'm on mobile so please bare with me and any mistakes I make. Also if things seem a bit jumbled.

First off, the summary is really hectic. I like that you included what Fandoms are in the story and what parts stop being canon but I think it is a little cluttered. Maybe have the summary seperase from your helpful notes?

Second there's a lot to take in on the first chapter. I loved the ironic twist that the doctor joked about pregnancy and he actually is pregnant and his just disbelief in the situation. I think you made it pretty realistic in regards to what your writing. I like how you mixed everything up with different Fandoms and aliens.

On the grammatical and spelling front the story is amazing, very well written and original. You're doing a great job.

Wow, there seems to be a lot going on in the summary alone. So many characters from so many other things. And sadly, the only one that I know is Doctor Who. Let's just say that this is going to be a fun and new experience for me, reading about characters I know nothing about. I just hope I can keep up.

I think Kurt made the best decision about the entity. Unless someone tries to stop him in the third chapter (ahem, Doctor). I mean, whatever it is, it can't be human since traditionally, men can't get pregnant since they don't have a uterus. And of course, nothing can be done about it, which is awful. I'm just hoping that it doesn't end up killing him in the end because that would be the worst.

This story idea, involving aliens, different fandoms, with a crazy and messed up situation is just so exciting. So many things can happen within the story, and I don't even think I could guess what they are. I was surprised to found out the news of Kurt's situation. I think, if you couldn't already tell, that this story is magnificent; it's original, fascinating, and just overall awesome. Good work so far!

Hi! I’m here from my candy bowl :). As I was reading I found one off thing with grammar and that was the word had in a sentence should be hand. The man extended his free hand. Other thing that I found confusing about the first chapter is that you start out in Kurt’s point of view, and then switch in the middle to Dr. Samuels. I understand why you switched, but it was so sudden that It confused me for like two paragraphs. Now, that all that is said… I like how you write, you structure your sentences so they pull readers right into the scene. I found myself guessing what was wrong with Kurt until the ultrasound. I like that you don’t overwhelm with medical knowledge you use simple words that people understand. Honestly I don’t know why you don’t have more comments on this. You’ve done really good work. Keep it up!

Aw, poor Kurt! I'm still amazed by how well you write his character. :)

I adore your writing and this story is captivating. I am definitely looking forward to your next update!

TORCHWOOD! OMFG you just took this story to a whole new level of yay!

I just read your first chapter. I absolutely love your writing voice. The story is intriguing, and I can hear Kurt in the dialogue you've written for him. I noticed a few typeos, similiar to the ones I find in my own writing when I've re-written a paragraph several times and missed an extra word or forgot to insert something simple lol. Nothing that detracts from your writing. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story :)

I should have realized what was up when I first saw the title, but that wasn't even in my mind when I started reading this. Your descriptions and flow is really good; there is enough of a balance between dialogue and description. I like that it was easy to read, and you didn't really bombard us with all kinds of information, you just painted a really good picture. I'm not going to go on and read anymore, because I'm not personally interested, but it seems like it's interesting. Good luck with it!

Also, I'm sorry it took so long for me to get you your candies from my candy bowl.

As the writer of an mpreg myself, I can say that I never would've thought about aliens being the cause. I did enjoy the creativity, though. There are three different fandoms in this, right? Crossovers are always fun. I did also really like how Martha understood that it was Tish's decision on what she wanted to do with the baby (being pro-choice and all). It sucked they couldn't get it out, and the description of the thing gave a sort of chill. With Kurt, I understand his decision to stay away from Adam, but I gotta agree with Rachel. At least they've got each other; I think that's the most important thing if he's not going to go to his boyfriend(?). It didn't make much sense that Burt left, though. If that were my son, I probably would've stayed with him or at least a little closer. Interesting story thus far!

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A Glee FF? Haven't read many of those! Just an FYI I didn't watch past the first season, so if I say something dumb -- ignore me.

I've never read a supernatural glee fanfiction either. So that should be interesting.

I like where the story starts, it starts off easily and sets up a good scene after the whirlwind that was your summary. I think for summaries less is more, it's just supposed to be a tease. Reading through your chapters I feel like I'm losing who the characters really are. I feel like there should always be more definition in the way someone talks, like what's their favourite phrase? Because you are using someone else's character's it's really important to pay attention to these things, it helps give more depth.

Hi, sorry it took me so long to get to smashing your mailbox (candy bowl). I’ve had a busy couple of weeks and then my computer lost my saved page. Gerr… But anyway, this is a very interesting theme for a story. I absolutely adore Doctor Who. I haven’t gotten very far in Torchwood, but I love Jack so I am stoked for some Jackness. Also, I’ve only seen the first season of Glee so I’m not very up-to-date on Kurt’s happenings. ALSO I AM A HUGE X-FILES FAN. So it was a very unique surprise to find out this story was a blend of those fandoms.

I felt so bad for Kurt in the beginning because that must have been a terrifying situation to be in. Definitely a Mulder/Scully case. I apologize for my inability to form words right now. I’ve fried my brain with my psychology paper and I’m super tired. Either way, I’m hoping that the Doctor comes along and figures out what is causing all these impossible pregnancies. (I also have a feeling Rachel’s got an impossible one too.) I also hope that the Torchwood gang finds out about Kurt and helps him through this. Also can’t wait for Mulder/Scully action.

As far as your writing goes, grammar is on point. You were able to carry the plot smoothly from one chapter to another. This is especially great in the transition from Kurt/Glee to the Torchwood chapter. Even though Glee and Torchwood have such a completely different vibe, you managed to keep the same voice and make it work wonderfully. Also, the character's emotions and reactions are very real and I feel so bad for them. So I hope you continue to keep up the good work!

Caaaaandy boooowl!!

Alright, so I don't watch ANY of these shows, whatsoever. But my friend does, and he takes it upon himself to tell me all about them, so I've heard all about Torchwood and the Doctor. That aside, I REALLY REALLY REALLY love the idea of an alien story. I think it's even more groovy that this poor guy is pregnant. It's crazy. But then again, aliens. Anything is possible in this crossed universe you've created, which I need to add, is extremely clever and hard to pull off Becca's so do have knowledge on how complex all of these universes is. So, props to you.

I really enjoyed your word use and your grammar is superb and your flow is like a river. It was interesting and it gripped me in by the unique idea. This is awesome, this is truly awesome. I really enjoyed what I read. Keep on writing!

I love the ominous tone in the first chapter, and at first I kinda chuckled at the pregnancy joke Dr. Samuels made, but I really like how it tied into Kurt’s actual condition. You’ve done a great job at describing the emotions going through Kurt’s head, which are perfectly understandable and I really hope he turns out fine!

Being a cisgender pregnant male would definitely be weird for anybody to go through, and I especially like the suspense building with it. I, for one, am definitely curious to see just how it happened XD Even with the supernatural aspect, there’s a nice sense of reality in this in the way the characters interact and speak, which is always nice to see. His discussion with Rachel and Santana was difficult to read because of all of the tangible emotion that you packed into it, and so far it’s my favorite part – it was so real.

I like the differences between Kurt’s reaction to the alien baby and the Torchwood universe’s reaction; I know next-to-nothing about Glee and Torchwood, but I still understand what’s going on, and I love the contrast between them. You’ve crossed them over very well and I’m interested to see what else happens here!

oh my gosh, this is definitely a lot to handle. I'm just impressed you thought to combine all of these shows together into one universe; that alone is pretty impressive. (which I haven't watched any of, except for a few episodes of The X Files, but I'm gonna try my best to follow along!)

the concept of males getting pregnant reminds me of The Sims 2, oddly enough, haha. I don't know if I've ever seen it happen in other media (except in that one Cosby show episode where all the guys in the family give birth to sandwiches...but I'm getting off topic) it's a very unique plot line, so I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes!

Wow, good read thus far! I like the concept of aliens impregnating people, not just females. Pretty creepy yet intriguing to know why the purpose is. I like how it explains both characters Kurt and Tish on their coping with the situation, adds more to the mystery! You've caught my eye so I'm def. subbing. looking forward to an update!

i have never read a story about aliens impregnating people before this is very interesting !!