This is such a fantastic start. I love that she's with chance!!!!! I absolutely love how you brought that fact into the first chapter. So you know right off what the situation is now. I cannot wait for the rest of this!!!!!
I just went and looked back at the first two parts, and I actually remember reading some of the first part! I'm not quite into fanfiction too much these days, nor am I really a big FIR fan anymore, but this will obviously get the support it deserves. I'd bet good money that it turns out to be a great story! I wish you luck with it!