Only Human - Comments

Hey, here as the new judge for the "Do Whatever You Want" contest!

Oh I really like the emotion and description in this. You really helped me get into his mind as he spotted her and the emotion and feelings that came afterwards made me anticipate that they might connect eyes or something and then we'd get some anxiety or sadness, but we get neither, rather he decides to be brave and go over to her. The fact that he had trouble walking over to her really emphasised how difficult it was going to be, of how he might not actually want to go and talk to her but he also does so he's battling with that conflict when he, as you put it, "was able to understand the concept of walking again".

You build up for a meet and I'm thinking we're going to get that, this is it, and then we get the twist that no, it's not her, and his hopes deflate at the same rate as mine. No cute connection, no confrontation, nothing like that - and yet it's perfect. Having it be her would have shattered the emotion, of everything he had built up in the walk over to her. Also it was cyclic! I absolutely love that about stories. It starts and ends with him with drugs and that was a perfect way to round off this piece.

This was really good. I love the simplicity of the scene that's just chalked full of your imagery and descriptions. Such a great read.

Hey, here as the new judge for the "Do Whatever You Want" contest!

Oh I really like the emotion and description in this. You really helped me get into his mind as he spotted her and the emotion and feelings that came afterwards made me anticipate that they might connect eyes or something and then we'd get some anxiety or sadness, but we get neither, rather he decides to be brave and go over to her. The fact that he had trouble walking over to her really emphasised how difficult it was going to be, of how he might not actually want to go and talk to her but he also does so he's battling with that conflict when he, as you put it, "was able to understand the concept of walking again".

You build up for a meet and I'm thinking we're going to get that, this is it, and then we get the twist that no, it's not her, and his hopes deflate at the same rate as mine. No cute connection, no confrontation, nothing like that - and yet it's perfect. Having it be her would have shattered the emotion, of everything he had built up in the walk over to her. Also it was cyclic! I absolutely love that about stories. It starts and ends with him with drugs and that was a perfect way to round off this piece.

This was really good. I love the simplicity of the scene that's just chalked full of your imagery and descriptions. Such a great read.

*dry heaves slightly*

This made so happy and so sad all at the same time because now everything's messed up and I wanna go back to this but that's not happening and the entire time I was reading it, I could hear Augustana playing and it was cool. It was cool.

Putting aside my fangirling, oh my god. The detail, the imagery, the descriptions, the emotion portrayal, it was all so beautiful and lush; so well-written. I was mesmerized and I fell so in love with this. I couldn't find anything that didn't flow and nothing stuck out. It was so smooth and truly beautiful. So I thank you for writing a beautifully heartbreaking Eclare fanfiction and using my favorite promo to do so.