Love Fool - Comments

@ sans sheriff.
Thank you so much for the comment! It means the world to me to know it was decent given the circumstances. I was in a rush and I'll work on spreading out my plot a little more smoothly. The tips you gave me will definitely help me in the long run.

As for my hospital incident- It wasn't short at all but I am happy and well although still being monitored; thanks for caring.

My playlist by the way, was just a station I started of Fall Out Boy on Spotify- Its a great feeling to know music connects people so quickly.

Thank you so much, have a great day!!

First of all, I hope your stay in hospital was short and that you're recovered, well and happy now!

I absolutely loved the plot! It was so original and the characters were beyond lovely by possessing that love/hate relationship. It was great how you actually made this into a chaptered story rather than just a one-shot, because I would've definitely wanted to find out more and see where it all goes. At your author's note in the final chapter, you included a song I love by ADTR and I couldn't help but wonder how sick your playlist (if you write listening to music) was! I can already see that you have a killer taste in music, so kuddos to you!

Let's not allow the fangirl inside me to escape.... Moving on! It was great how you gave us visuals too by including photos of the characters - it made it that easier to picture them in our heads and throughout the entire story, seeing as it escalated quite rapidly. Which brings me to my unfortunate constructive criticism... Personally, I really enjoy stories that progress in a way that somewhat feels like real time (although that's an illusion) and the plot unraveled super quick. You're not to blame because I know you were working towards meeting a deadline and you didn't have the time, but had you then just worked with two chapters or perhaps even one that took things slowly so I could attach myself further with the characters, then I would've preferred it that way. If this is your actual writing style, by no means should you change it! Never change it to best suit someone's personal opinion, nevertheless mine.

Overall, I was really pleased with your content! Especially the dialogue. I don't know why but I love how your dialogue is so close to the real thing. By that I mean that it was so genuine that it didn't feel like a forced script upon the characters, but it ran smoothly.