Foreign - Comments

This isn't the type of story that I would usually read, but what I've read so far is great! When I read the first chapter, it was like I was transported to a glamorous world of photography and sexiness.

The end of chapter 2 gripped me too, when Daniel revealed that he already knew Faith's name. How does he know??? Gahh I need to find out!

The only thing I noticed was that you switch back and forth between past and present tenses in the 2nd half of chapter 2. But it's only a small thing! Everything else was brilliant. You've got a great story going here!

Comment swap: Wow this story starts of very good. I like the way you enter this story! Oh and I do digg a female photographer, instead of her being the model!

really liked this sentence: Faith's body was half-way in the car now, just one leg outside of the cab. "Portfolio. Freddie Tusio. Sam Wei. Tomorrow morning--got it." Faith repeated back.

and then: Daniel, oh daniel haha.

I must say: You 'owned' this chapter. I truly love reading your writing!

Mmm, this Daniel fellow sounds interesting.....and sexy lol. Lmao I loved the funny little puns you added in there about Faith's name. Hahaha, I like how she was sarcastic to Daniel. Lawl. I wonder about the Sam guy....if he will be hot or some old elderly fellow. Maybe she gets into a live triangle with Sam and Daniel. Rofl! Me and my scenarios.

I love the way you write, dear. Always entertaining and I keep wanting to read more and more. I like the idea of this story and you made me feel like I was actually in Hong Kong the way you described the flowers and studio setting. Great job! I just need MOAR!!!!!!

Okay so I'm writing this on my phone so let's see how this goes.

First of all, love the face claims. Heart eyes to all of them.

Secondly, I like faith. Off the bat I already know that I will be rooting for her and I see it for her. I like the interactive between her, Stella, and the cab driver. Very human and very good. I also liked the little prep talk she gave herself.

All in all this was really good and I've been eyeballing this for days. I like your writing and you will see me around for this cause I wanna see how this progresses.

I like this chapter. I like it because Faith continuously gives herself pep-talks "I'm going to fucking own it!" I do that on a daily basis, so it's totally relateble, and funny at the same time. You make Faith such a believable character, and it almost seems like it's not a story but like a movie in my head kind of. I love that. I also love how Stella seems like a character straight out of the move The Devil Wears Prada. She's brilliant. Your background is beautiful, wording grand. I appreciate so much that I didn't find any grammar mistakes in this! I always find one or two in everything I read, but this was great. I can't wait to see where it goes.

The background to this story is GORGEOUS! I just had to say it. (sorry, not relate to your work!)

The title to the story is great. It made me guess about the story before I got to read it, which I always like to do. The way you wrote was like I was mind reading someone! And I agree with everything the first commenter said about the characters. EXCELLENT development so far. I can't wait to see more!

I have to say; while this is not generally the type of story I read at all, I really enjoyed your introduction. It is fabulously written, and all your characters are realistic enough to step out of the computer screen.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this!
Best regards, Ike.