Wonderless - Comments

Omg Vic talked. I waited so long for that moment feeeellllssss

This fanfic is sooooo awesome keep writing

Alrighty, so, I'm loving this story, but there are a few things that bother me a bit, but they're nothing major. One is in the beginning when you're writing about Alex being shot, I think you should add a few more details about what's going on around Vic. Like what was everyone doing, did he hear people talking? That kinda thing.

In the present day portion, I noticed that in the second paragraph, you left out the d in bed.

And in this paragraph:
My parents had explained my situation to the staff. My guide knew sign language since his father was deaf and his boyfriend. No I didn't have a problem with him being gay seeing as I am too. I was told this school is very open by my parents who also know my sexuality.

The second sentence is worded a bit awkwardly. Did you mean the guide's boyfriend was deaf, too? If not then maybe you can reword it like this: My guide knew of sign language because of his father being deaf, and he, too, had a boyfriend.

And in this paragraph:
I looked up at him seeing as he towered over me. I was a little frightened by him he looked like a typical jock but didn't seem like an asshole.
It seems like there should either be a comma or a period between him and he.

And in the last paragraph, i think you should add went in the last portion of the sentence so it'll make a little more sense.

I'm not trying to nitpick, but I tend to notice small minor mistakes so yeah, again, I apologize. I mean nothing by this review.

I loved the entirety of this first chapter and how Mike, Austin, and Kellin are all supportive and understanding of Vic's situation, even more for Vic's parents for understanding. i can't wait to see how Vic will deal with his demons. I just hope he starts talking vocally soon.

I know there are more chapters to this story but it's really late and I'm about to go to bed soon, so thanks for the great read and i hope to read more soon. Great job on a wonderful story.

I love this. Ughh

Really hope you can update as soon as possible
This is dramatic and just filled with details
that i just fucking love!
I need more stories like this in my fucking life!

This is fucking perfect!
I can't wait to read more!
Fuck yah! :3

Please update I love this:)

Please update I love this:)