This is "truly" poetic, beautiful, amazing - I may insert any adjective I want to describe how soul searching and crafted this story or poem is written, but I do not want to sound redundant. I think it may hit home for a lot of people because we all feel like this some point in our lives - incomplete and not worthy of things people may say we are.
Your writing style is creative and the broken up lines shows how things may not so easily come together, but in the end, may make sense, if we look deep enough. This story reminds me of a story I am in the process of writing called, "we are the fucked generation" even the banner of the crying girl shares some similarities - it's like crying out our very own soul, our existence, all the things that make us wonderful and colorful in a dull world, you know?
"Burning" I would assume how she feels inside and at nineteen, those types of emotions of uncertainty are common, but does not always have to be felt and in many ways there is a feeling of hopelessness and that makes me sad.
"I spent years chasing after everybody else’s dreams." - I thought that was a beautiful line, among many through out and I just love what you are doing here, writing in third person works well of perspective, for me at least and I feel I get more out of things reading that way. You have lovely diction and there is nothing wrong here.
Your writing style is creative and the broken up lines shows how things may not so easily come together, but in the end, may make sense, if we look deep enough. This story reminds me of a story I am in the process of writing called, "we are the fucked generation" even the banner of the crying girl shares some similarities - it's like crying out our very own soul, our existence, all the things that make us wonderful and colorful in a dull world, you know?
"Burning" I would assume how she feels inside and at nineteen, those types of emotions of uncertainty are common, but does not always have to be felt and in many ways there is a feeling of hopelessness and that makes me sad.
"I spent years chasing after everybody else’s dreams." - I thought that was a beautiful line, among many through out and I just love what you are doing here, writing in third person works well of perspective, for me at least and I feel I get more out of things reading that way. You have lovely diction and there is nothing wrong here.
Thank you for writing this.