That was beautifully written! The way the fire is described, that him, himself is the fire. I love how you started the first 'arc'. I agree with Liacide, it definitely has a poetic feeling throughout it. That's part of what's so beautiful about it. It's elegant and dangerous, and by the end, you're wondering if he is fire physically, mentally or emotionally. We shall see... I don't have any advice, you seem to have everything down beautifully. I don't think it really needed you to describe how everything looked, just based on how you wrote how it felt/ Sometimes the sense of touch and viewing it from another point of view (Almost out of body) is stronger than writing how it looked. Great job on that! Many stories lack this. Great job! I am extremely excited to see what comes next, you are a fabulous writer, keep it up
March 11th, 2015 at 03:49am