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  • WhereMyDemonsHide

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    That was beautifully written! The way the fire is described, that him, himself is the fire. I love how you started the first 'arc'. I agree with Liacide, it definitely has a poetic feeling throughout it. That's part of what's so beautiful about it. It's elegant and dangerous, and by the end, you're wondering if he is fire physically, mentally or emotionally. We shall see... Mr. Green I don't have any advice, you seem to have everything down beautifully. I don't think it really needed you to describe how everything looked, just based on how you wrote how it felt/ Sometimes the sense of touch and viewing it from another point of view (Almost out of body) is stronger than writing how it looked. Great job on that! Many stories lack this. Great job! I am extremely excited to see what comes next, you are a fabulous writer, keep it up Very Happy
    March 11th, 2015 at 03:49am
  • Kross

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    @ Liacide XIII
    Awh, thank you very much for your comment!! You're too kind!
    I definitely went for a more poetic feel while writing this, and I appreciate you noticing. ^^
    Truth be told, I never actually planned on posting any more stories on Mibba, until my friend and I started focusing a lot on our main story, Mein Licht, and she thought it would be a good idea to post it on here. After joining in on this little comment swap, however, I think I'm going to start being a lot more active on here! So, hopefully, I will get some of Scratch put up!
    It does take a long time to write, because of its poetic format, but it's very enjoyable.
    Thanks again for reading!
    March 9th, 2015 at 05:04am
  • LiacideXIII

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    This. This is like poetry reading this and I absolutely love it! Why must you tease me so and only have one chapter? I normally get confused with odd pairings of paragraphs, but something about this one just seemed to add the fire to the flame so to speak There wasn’t much detail, but I don’t think it really needed it, considering what you did put on there seemed to do the trick. I could just imagine this fire and could almost feel the mothers fear busting forth. I think you did very well on this and I look forward to reading more from you! Recommending and Subscribing!
    March 9th, 2015 at 04:34am
  • toobadsodead

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    Yeah, so... I finished my exam and was looking to see if you posted in After, only to find that you updated a story in "my mibba" page XD so I read the summary... And loved it. And then I started reading the first chapter and loved that too. I don't know... It's super attention grabbing and.. Well, there aren't really words I can use to describe it. But it completely sucked me in. That was an amazing start and I can't wait to read more.

    Yay, comments Twitch
    January 15th, 2015 at 06:26pm