March 5th, 2016 at 06:28pm
Summary:
I feel like the paragraph in the summary could've been put into the author's note, as it was unnecessary information. I do like the small blurb you added at the end. It didn't give too much information, but not so little that I didn't know what was going to go on, if that makes sense.
Chapter One:
I really like the first chapter. I think it gives a really good look at what's to be expected. Obviously there are strong feelings from the narrator.
Chapter Two:
Wow, this chapter was unexpected and so sad... My heart goes out for the narrator. I can't even imagine that. I'm wondering if they blame themselves for what happened.
Chapter Three:
Oh, God, they were going to propose to her???? That bit hurt me so much. The guilt they feel just kills me inside.
Honestly, this was beautiful. The shortness of everything made everything hit me so much harder than something drawn out. I loved this piece so much. You did such a fantastic job on it! I didn't see any mistakes and the flow was perfect.
I really liked this, excellent job!