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  • I.Am.Batman.

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    Wow, this is terrific. I haven't run in to s story quite like this. It's brutally honest and lays the story out like, "There. I said it." Smart move, I o my wish I had the idea first.
    March 4th, 2016 at 07:04am
  • Nanook

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    We are seriously in sync. I went to my subscriptions page to check on another story to see that this was updated just like a minute before I got to the page. XD
    That is so weird. That has never happened before.
    But I'm happy that you updated! :D
    This update was quite sad. :( She missed out on 6 months of the kids lives; I feel bad that they didn't have their mother there for them. :( And Alex, aw.
    I'm glad she wasn't that girl in the morgue, though, my gosh. I thought for sure it was going to be her. Just the mood of this story, it seemed to be heading that way. But the police mistaked her? Really? Like how does that even happen? Unless her wallet didn't have picture identification, but still, Alex knew right away. Weird.
    I'm happy he found her though. I'm interested in learning what she was up to and also interested in seeing what she'll do next. Will she stay? Does she still want a divorce? :/
    Great job with the update though! :) A few things I have to note, grammar check wise:

    But Alex sucked it up, shut off his car and entered the station looking for said ,Captain.
    I don't think that extra comma should be before Captain.
    "Mr. Gaskarth, we found Olivia at about 5 in the morning today," Captain Johnson stTedr.
    I'm thinking that word at the end should be 'stated'? Not sure what happened there. Or 'started' maybe?
    "Where is she? When can I see her?!" Alex shouted standing from his seat, desperate to see his wife."
    Remove the extra quote " at the very end.
    And... I think that's all I saw.
    But again, great job! Loved the update and can't wait for more! :D
    January 12th, 2016 at 07:52am
  • Nanook

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    Oh. My. GOD.
    That was like the intensest update ever. They went from being happy to just... just... :(((
    What. What just happened.
    And she's just LEAVING. Like oh my gosh, not just Alex either, but the kids and everything.
    This is so sad. Like there are literally tears in my eyes.
    Great job with the update. I was not expecting that, at all. But you seriously need to update again now. You can't leave me hanging like that, nooooooo... :((
    I'm so sad now. lol. Like if that wasn't obvious.
    I'm glad you finally updated, though.
    Can't wait for more!
    August 17th, 2015 at 05:27pm
  • Nanook

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    Aw, I loved the Neverland part. So sweet. :)
    They're married! Aww aww... when I picture Thomas I picture baby Alex and it's making me emotional. XD Alex Gaskarth as a baby is quite possibly the cutest baby in history. XD
    Um... something I will note though is that a few words in the chapter were very off. Some of them were actual words filling in for other words that would have made more sense. For instance, at this part:
    The priest droned on for a few minutes, Olivia and Alex not really raging attention until it was time for vows.
    I think it should have been the word 'paying' instead of 'raging.'
    And then this next sentence, the second half of it I couldn't even comprehend:
    When Olivia's eyes met Alex's for the first time that day, she hk were she had black real reason to be nervous.
    Like I think I know what you were trying to say but after that comma so much is off. XD It's almost like spell check intervened with a few parts throughout the chapter. Did you use your phone to type it maybe?
    There are other parts but yeah, just thought I'd give some feedback with that, especially the part where I didn't get what you were trying to say.
    But other than that, loved the update! :) Can't wait for the next.
    I'm sad cause I take it it's almost over? :(
    May 15th, 2015 at 08:07am
  • Nanook

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    Aha OMG. XD
    Oh, and I didn't necessarily mean the petty fighting, I was talking about when he almost hit her. :O Like hopefully that doesn't ever happen again. I realize fights as in arguments are pretty normal for any relationship, but yeah, just hopefully it doesn't get that intense again.
    April 9th, 2015 at 10:30am
  • jp_ayee

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    @ Nanook
    Loll, no need to apologize, it's all good(: and you can Thank my best friend for the comment about his nose, she's always making fun of it. But the fighting, it wouldn't be right for them not to fight, but it should be smooth sailing until the end. No promises though (;
    April 9th, 2015 at 07:06am
  • Nanook

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    OMG I just got it. XD Okay, LMAO. I guess I just needed that explanation, sorry. I was so lost. XD Like i wasn't really pronouncing it out loud but since you asked that I got it now. lol. Sorry for my reaction. :P

    As for the new update...
    Aww, they had a baby girl awwwww. :) So cute. And on Jack's birthday! :D
    "She has your stupid ‘Whoville’ looking nose."
    I have never seen a more accurate sentence in my life OH MY GOD. He totally has one! XD Or well kind of. This is so funny OMG. XD
    I got concerned though when they were fighting. :( Hopefully nothing like that happens again.
    But anyway, you are awesome at updating keep it up. :D
    April 9th, 2015 at 06:20am
  • jp_ayee

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    @ Nanook
    Omg, it's nothing against Jenna at all. But reread the entire name. It was based on a joke that alex made on twitter, I just changed the spelling. What does Jenna Talia sound like?
    April 8th, 2015 at 08:48pm
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    @ AddictedtoZacky
    awee, Thank you. That means a lot
    April 8th, 2015 at 08:46pm
  • Nanook

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    Um, excuse me. Am I missing something? XD Why didn't she like the name Jenna?
    I guess I'm slightly offended because that's my name. XD Is there a story behind that or...? XD
    Like I found it funny that you chose that name since I just started commenting. lol. Like I was thinking it was gonna be a dedication of sorts. :P But now that's not the choice, which I'm kind of glad for because I find it weird reading the name in stories anyway, but yeah. XD Like she seemed slightly offended that he suggested it.
    I like the other names though too. But yeah... I'm like laughing. XD
    But great job with the update. :) Can't wait for more!
    April 8th, 2015 at 05:20am
  • AddictedtoZacky

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    I'm not that big a fan of All Time Low, but I can't stop reading this story. I absolutely love this story, and it is one of the best written stories I have ever seen.
    April 8th, 2015 at 03:29am
  • Nanook

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    Yay, I'm glad my comment inspired an update! I wasn't expecting you to post already but yay! :D
    Awww awww... such a sweet chapter. I wasn't expecting that to happen yet. But I'm so excited for Olivia and Alex! Aha. Is that weird?
    Great job with the update! Can't wait for more! :D
    April 7th, 2015 at 06:33am
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    @ Nanook
    thank you! what you said really means a lot, because I am always torn with my writing, but regardless, I am in the process of writing new chapters to finish this story (:
    April 7th, 2015 at 03:15am
  • Nanook

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    This is a really good story, I'm surprised that it doesn't have more comments.
    I realize it's been a little while since you last updated it, but I just wanted to comment and let you know that if you do choose to continue, I will be here to read. :)
    It's not a typical story either, it's very drama-filled and I haven't come across this plot line before.
    You're a great writer and I really hope that this story continues. :)
    April 6th, 2015 at 10:21am
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    @ electra heart.
    I'm glad you enjoy it(:
    November 19th, 2014 at 06:18am
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    I'm definitely going to have to subscribe to this story! I've spent all day reading it and can't wait for more!
    November 18th, 2014 at 10:55pm
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    @ Franceschi;
    thank youu(: Tbh, this story started out as me venting, because Alex and Olivia are slightly based off of people that I know, so when I found it on my computer again, I just rearranged it & this is how it ended up, loll. & the whole addict idea mainly came up because I wanted to do something different. A lot of stories on here are redundant in the aspect of plots, my past stories included. So this story's a not only a journey for people to read, but a journey for me to write, and get it all out there in a believable aspect. But I'm glad you're enjoying it, because that gives me more motivation to keep writing it(:
    November 15th, 2014 at 05:49am
  • Franceschi;

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    I loved it. It's so touching that he's going to try. Or at least, while he's sober he thinks so, lol. I really like that you're writing them as addicts. I really enjoy the story so far and I can't wait to see where it's going. Thank you for updating so quickly. You're a doll<3.
    November 15th, 2014 at 02:07am
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    @ Franceschi;
    next chapter should be out some time tonight(:
    November 14th, 2014 at 09:25pm
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    @fallwithsirens

    thank you, I'm glad you like it.
    November 14th, 2014 at 09:24pm