The Natural Order of Things - Comments

@ tadhana
thank you! to be honest i'd forgotten i'd recommended it whoooops. the descriptions are purposely vague to be described at later points, but i should probably give just a little more backstory, you're right. (as for finch -- the culture they come from has super loose gender norms so most people from that culture don't really have 'preferred pronouns'.) but yeah definitely thank you! i appreciate the constructive bits especially; no one ever offers those.

I completely agree with southpaw's comment. Your descriptions are absolutely flawless; it's not over the top nor is it too little. It's a perfect amount of adjectives I'd like to see in a story.

The summary was ridiculous - in a good way. It just made me go like "woah," because it was written quite well. That's the kind of summaries that good stories have. It's enticing and gives you an insane amount of curiosity to check out the story.

I can tell you've done a lot of work with this piece. It's easy to make a universe but making the story wrap around it is pretty hard. Not many authors can make it work because some just makes it very awkward. I just got confused at some parts like why you refer to Finch as they (though I think I have an inkling about it) and what's an Osteovore. Although I think I can find that out if I read it again and again, but it would be nice - I guess - if you can input some definitions or like descriptions about what is this and that so that readers won't get confused. That's just my two cents though. Sometimes, information just processes slow in my brain. Also, the backstory is okay. It's very much appreciated. Overall, the story is great; the universe is well-thought of. I like the little bit of suspense 'cause it keeps it going. I forgot the other points I was going to say but I will edit this if I remember it.

edit: YOUR LAYOUT IS AMAZING
there, I remembered one of them. Hopefully, I can remember the rest.

@ southpaw
(Sometimes I forget Mibba people follow my Tumblr... oh no. Hah.)
Thank you!! I've been investing way too much time into this stupid story. I have more backstory than really necessary, I have a bad habit of tormenting the hell out of Ferre, and I've done actual maps of the planet. And Finch is indeed precious, I love them to death. c:

(I've been meaning to read this for like forever but I've been super busy but I kept seeing your art for this story on Tumblr and I love it and so I was just like "OKAY. IT IS OFFICIALLY TIME.")

And I love it. You always manage to hit that perfect balance between being descriptive and not being overly flowery, and I can tell you've put so much work into building this world. I honestly feel like this could be a published sci-fi novel, and I love the fact that there are just these little glimpses into this universe without the descriptions being overbearing or confusing. Plus the characters are brilliant and Finch is absolutely precious.