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  • dawn of light

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    So wonderful summary. I liked that you did it with that certain style because it's just short and sweet, and a nice brain picker.

    I liked the small details you added to give me a sense of who Evelyn is-- especially here “...come back home to read, write or paint…” because you added that in smoothly and so shyly, and I really liked that. You also give me details about Lucas--adding in his high-class belongs and his own normal behavior--and I just thought it was great! Because you do this thing where you carefully plan out what being said and done, it all comes out as seamless. And I love love love that.

    The character development for Eve is just lovely. You used the first chapter to that advantage, as I can tell through her mindset and her actions. I have to say, I might be afraid of Eve’s character lmfao like, I wouldn't wanna cross worlds with her. Also I noticed a switch in her tone in chapter two compared to chapter one. She goes from being angry to being broken and that just broke my heart. Then she goes into a witty zone when she met Ben, and to be honest, I was slightly confused with that because now, to me, she's a different person? But hopefully that feeling may change when more chapters are updated.

    I just felt so sad, to be honest, when she was crying in the suite. Especially since she really wanted to get married. The line where she says, “The worst part of being in a giant suite all by yourself is that you remember you were supposed to be married and here with your other half,” just tore my heart in half. I get a sense that deep down she really did have feeling for Lucas (even if it was just a “crush” feeling) and that just again, breaks my heart. I felt so so sad. I really hope Ben makes her feel better, if not, who will at this point?

    I like Ben, especially towards the end when he's like DON’T TELL MY BOSS” because I got a sense that he is serious but he's being nonchalant about it, you know? I just loved how it ended. And the fact that he used his job’s suite? OMFG lmfao lmfao

    Overall, I love how in just two chapters, I know that this plot you have is planned out nicely. I got a sense of who Eve was and parts of who Lucas was (I hope to read more about him later!) Some parts where her mother is mentioned, I also get a nice introduction from her. And I liked that a lot. So far, I'm loving this drama filled story, with all the twists and turns you're adding in. I'd say you have a lovely start so great job on this entry!
    August 12th, 2016 at 04:07am
  • Brittt

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    I'm honestly so excited for the next update. What an exciting story. Can't wait to see what awaits for her on her "honeymoon". Lucas, you're such an assclown though. Why would you even do that?! tsk tsk. I'm glad she found out before she got married though. Who knows though? Maybe she will meet a new guy in London. I like how calm she seemed to be when she walked in on them in bed together. I probably wouldn't have been able to keep my cool like she was. The part where she set his shit on fire is what got me going. That sounds like something I'd do.

    The layout is fab as always & the summary sucked me right in. I'm already excited for the next update. lmfao
    July 15th, 2016 at 12:00am
  • dawn of light

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    I LOVE THE SUMMARY
    this sounds amazing Wow
    February 3rd, 2016 at 07:51pm