February 22nd, 2015 at 04:42pm
@ Join the Masquerade
Thank you for your comment! I will definitely use all of that to edit my piece. I understood about what you meant with certain errors, like the one about the cough. I just didn't know how to word some of it. I am going to use what you gave me though. I really appreciate your comment and I am terribly sorry about your friend.
Oh, and I did think about adding more one-shots to it, with prequels and sequels. That way I can do it in the order I want and it doesn't really require as much dedication as a chaptered story, if you know what I mean.
@ Don'tFearTheReaper
Don't worry, you didn't post twice.
I appreciate your criticism and I will use it to help edit my piece. Some of the errors you pointed out had me going, why in the world didn't I notice that?! Ah well, I'm going to fix these errors in a bit though.
Thank you for your comment! I will definitely use all of that to edit my piece. I understood about what you meant with certain errors, like the one about the cough. I just didn't know how to word some of it. I am going to use what you gave me though. I really appreciate your comment and I am terribly sorry about your friend.
Oh, and I did think about adding more one-shots to it, with prequels and sequels. That way I can do it in the order I want and it doesn't really require as much dedication as a chaptered story, if you know what I mean.
@ Don'tFearTheReaper
Don't worry, you didn't post twice.
I appreciate your criticism and I will use it to help edit my piece. Some of the errors you pointed out had me going, why in the world didn't I notice that?! Ah well, I'm going to fix these errors in a bit though.