This story is awesome, it flows perfectly and your detail creates decent images as you read. There's a couple of small mistakes that I spotted but nothing major I'll list them in case you wanna change them:
before going into my room and reading a book while I read.I think you meant to put reading a book while I ate
He brought me into my armsMy should be his
and on the very last line you put I instead of is
(I'm going to make a suggestion... you might be better off using the background picture as a banner (just resize it), and then have the background black so that the writing is easier to read)
before going into my room and reading a book while I read. I think you meant to put reading a book while I ate
He brought me into my arms My should be his
and on the very last line you put I instead of is
(I'm going to make a suggestion... you might be better off using the background picture as a banner (just resize it), and then have the background black so that the writing is easier to read)