June 24th, 2017 at 05:43am
@ insufferable;
i did!! most of my summaries are song lyrics, including this one, so that was on purpose!!
omg thank you soo much!!! this means so much to me honestly. i don't think i've gotten a comment quite like this before and i am so flattered and grateful. thank you so much, bud uwu
First of all, I absolutely love the layout. It’s so simplistic yet so aesthetically pleasing. The banner is absolutely gorgeous, but I’m also very into the original/the photographer. The entire thing does well with the story.
And as for the content, I really loved it a lot. Your writing style is so incredibly poetic and fluid, from one moment to another. There was a certain depth to the imagery that was mesmerizing. One of my absolute favorite parts was: Sailors want love and money, a sky full of stars and an ocean full of fish. They want a kiss and a bang, a whoosh of wind and a splash. And they’ll do anything for it. Because it showed the desperation of the sailors; it showed me that although it was the sirens doing the luring, the sailors actually put themselves into the situation. You did all of this in under 300 words, which is amazing. I was enamored and completely immersed.
It’s a small thing, but I actually loved the center formatting of the opening and finishing sentences because it adds a subtle importance to them, and how they echoed each other differently. In the beginning, it was just a sentence that piqued curiosity but in the end, it was a heavy sentence that accentuated the foolishness of sailors.
Overall, I really really really loved this one-shot!