i rlly like the writing style of this so far, however, i noticed some phrases that just... i didn't appreciate, lol. one of the phrases that rubbed me the wrong way was, "...eyes as blue and swirly as a lava lamp," my problem with this being the fact i read the word "blue" and then i'm confronted with the imagery of a lava lamp, which is red. so for an instant, i imagine the eyes as this rlly horrible redish blue. the color conflicts, and i feel a better word would be less color-specific confusing. besides that, i like it. the layout is a bit simple, but it's not as busy as other's i've had the displeasure of seeing. i honestly rlly like this, but there's one thing i didn't understand... is this guy freshly dead or what? because once the good ole rigor mortis would provide difficulty in opening someone's eyelid, plus the smell would be horrendous. but like i said, other than that, it's a pleasant and interesting read.
July 25th, 2015 at 09:55pm