Mal de Mere - Comments

Wow! I just read your latest update and I was so blown away by it! My heart really ached for Jean and how he thought he was never going to be able to find her again. You wrote it so well with so much descriotion.

And that ending... WOW. It made me gasp and smile. Leaving it open ended like that really works and it adds that extra bit of magic to the entire story.

You've done such a good job. Congrats on writing such an amazing story!

@ The Human Slayer
I'm blasted away by your comment. It is so flattering! If I can ever make you a layout just let me know and I'll try! again, you make me speechless with your praise

why are all your story layouts so awesome?!

I was blown away by your writing. You did a blast an a half on it. You have some damn talent. The way you described everything, the way you worded your sentences, and how you set up your characters. Wow(times one million really). I was in such awe reading this. It made me excited because I love reading these type of plots. I will definitely wait for the next part!

@ chasingdaisies;
Thank you so much! I guess I will upload it next friday!

I love it! Can't wait to read the next part! (:

@ Michael Westen
Thank you so much for all the support!

@ Divine Faery
Yeah I am one to write long chapters, I'm sorry if it bothered you..
Thank you so much for the comment though!

@ Lady Nikki Nightmare
Thanks so much for your beta-reading and comment. You are great!

@ Artist Vs. Poet
Thanks for the comment-swap blog and all the love!

@ LadyBatCat
I've editted the little mistakes you found so I hope it is without any now. Thanks for the comment!

NEXT CHAPTER will be up next week!

The layout is very eye-catching and fits the story. It's lovely.

The story itself seems like a good read so far, there are just some little tiny mistakes.
1. In the first paragraph you said "whole" instead of "hole".
2. "She drifted on the seas current..." There needs to be an apostrophe to make it "sea's".
3. "She was saving him, or at least trying too." Only one o is needed.
4. "He cannot be foul hearted. He cannot be. He knew the drums to my heart. He showed them to me." I think this needs to be italicized.

Other than these, the story was brilliant. The descriptions were lovely and I could feel her confusion about what to do with the man. I'm definitely looking forwards to reading the final part.

The layout is very eye-catching and fits the story. It's lovely.

The story itself seems like a good read so far, there are just some little tiny mistakes.
1. In the first paragraph you said "whole" instead of "hole".
2. "She drifted on the seas current..." There needs to be an apostrophe to make it "sea's".
3. "She was saving him, or at least trying too." Only one o is needed.
4. "He cannot be foul hearted. He cannot be. He knew the drums to my heart. He showed them to me." I think this needs to be italicized.

Other than these, the story was brilliant. The descriptions were lovely and I could feel her confusion about what to do with the man. I'm definitely looking forwards to reading the final part.

I agree with Nikki! I'm so glad you decided to post this! You know how much I love this story, it's so beautifully written!

The layout is stunning! It fits your story so well! :) I'm glad you decided to post.

Ok I've read the story and while I was a bit intimidated by the length of it, since it's a two shot I could deal as long as I took short breaks lol.

Anyway the layout was simple but it fit the story well though I'd have gone for more bunk black and blue, but that's just me. I liked this story though and I am interested to see what happens in the second half. I believe I saw a blog you wrote about this so I know why he didn't answer her. I found out to be sweet though how his heart beat matched hers I figured he was talking abit his heart and not jars though it would have been amazing if he was given the situation.

In the end I really enjoyed this story I'm no grammar expert so I couldn't tell you if you made any mistakes and if you did I didn't catch it.

Wow, I LOVE this!

Your description is brilliant. It really did draw me in and create an atmosphere of fantasy and legends. You've done such a good job of writing the characters too, and way you gave subtle hints about the man being deaf was really good because it was just enough description without being too obvious, if you know what I mean.

I really can't wait to read the next chapter. Nice work!

This is so incredible. That isn't surprising though, everything you write is fantastic. I love the analogies, the descriptions. The way you ended the first part just blows me away. I hope you post the next part soon!