In the End. - Comments

Wow! This definitely is bringing back the nostalgia for me! I haven't seen a full episode of DBZ since I was like a little kid back in the 90s. Anyways, let's get to it!

The prologue is a really nice, short chapter. I like how it's not just there to provide the info you'll need to know about the main character, but it also just gives you a feel for who her friends are and how she is as a person. Her job as a hunter sounds interesting, if anything, I sorta hoped for more information on her job, but it sounds just like that of a bounty hunter so it's all good!

You can also see how close Bulma and she are. There's a big sense of concern for her and it shows how tight they are with one another. I like how Eve is kinda carefree with how she talks to Vegata, and I like how she's kinda spunky and sassy! Anyways, the first chapter starts off really nicely. I like how it's straight to business of being on the planet, but I also feel that maybe descriptions are a must for something like this? Like, perhaps you could go into detail of what the terrain is like - for instance is it like a jungle, desert, and so on. Then you could also maybe give a description of one of the creatures that's trying to eat her. Nonetheless, it's all a great start! I also like that you start of talking about how miserable she is on the planet, but then go into detail of how it happened.

And now I'm interested to know how Eve's partner is going to go about telling Bulma that she "died" on the planet since she sent them a message. I'm also interested in knowing how Goku will react since he seems very protective of her like a sister.

The small memories that Eve shares with Goku and them are super cute. Again, I wish that there was more detail going into the story because I was a little excited to read about how Goku or whoever would go about rescuing her from the planet.

Overall, this story has potential, and I'm so rooting for it because I loved DBZ as a kid! Keep it up!!

I love this, I havent seen a story like this before in the fandom - Really original idea :D

I can't wait to read more of it, You've made the entire thing seriously intriguing. Excellent stuff, Recc'ing and Subb'in for sure!

This is an interesting start. I like how close Goku, Eve, and Bulma are. ^^ And I see that sly attraction she has to Vegeta!