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  • hangsang.

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    Wow, this was a very intense first chapter, but I really enjoyed it! You really brought the reader in and made them wonder what was going on along with the girl. How did she get there? Who was holding her captive? What's even going on?

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    Your characterization of the brothers is so good. You got Dean's protective nature down to a T as well as Sam's worrying nature.

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    God, I'm in Sam and Dean's shoes. I really want whomever did what they did to Mickey to pay dearly.

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    Ned definitely doesn't seem like a good guy for Mickey. I think Lorena is right in the fact that she should dump him. Also, holy crap, I was not expecting that ending.

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    I love how helpful Sam was in this chapter. And Jo's reaction to seeing Mickey that way and her not recognizing her was painful. Well done!

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    I feel so bad for everyone. I feel bad for Mickey for not remembering and I feel bad for Sam, Dean, and the family for her not remembering any of them. I can't even imagine how painful that would be on them.

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    I'm glad they were able to get revenge for what happened to Mickey!

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    Yes, Cas to the rescue!

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    I like how you're taking your time with the flashbacks and Mickey getting her memory back. Her remembering Dean was really sweet though and I enjoyed that little moment between them.

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    Uh oh, something tells me something's going to go wrong with Mickey remembering everything. I'm getting so into this story and I can't wait to read more!!

    Eleven
    I like seeing the process of her meeting the boys and learning how to shoot a gun!

    Twelve
    I like how Mickey convinced Dean to give Sam's decision a chance. If not for her, who knows what Dean would've done. Or, it's obvious, but still.

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    Jo is a good sister and I'm glad she's sticking by Mickey. I'm glad all of them are sticking by her, actually.

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    I love Mickey and how she handles Dean. It's perfect. I'm sad I've reached the end of what you've got, so I'm definitely ready for another update. This was really good!
    November 17th, 2017 at 05:04am
  • abigail.

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    First off, I love the layout. God, I love the layout. Also, I feel like I need to add that I'm not really sure I know anything about SPN other than the main actors are very cute? But, alas, I am very interested.

    It felt as though a dozen battering rams had been bulldozed into her gut and there had been an explosion there, sending waves of agony through her limbs

    I want to comment on this sentence because this is exactly how I feel right now. Facepalm cramps

    She was cold too, there was a draft, wherever she was and the wind was grazing against her bare stomach, arms and legs.

    I don't really think that comma needs to be there. It just feels like an unnecessary break in the sentence, if that makes sense.

    As I come to the end of chapter one, I'm just like "???" because I just want to know why she was in the cave and who put her there. I like the way this was set up because it leads to the reader asking questions, wanting answers, and setting us up to read more.

    And reading chapter two has only left me with more questions (which obviously means I'm going to keep reading after I post this comment). I feel like there's so much about Mickey that I just need to know. Who is Sam to her? Why were they supposed to protect her? From what?

    God I just love your description and the imagery, as well. You've really done a great job with this. (Granted, I've never read anything of yours that I didn't just love.)

    So yes, I'm definitely excited to read this. I'm glad that you didn't waste time trying to introduce us to these characters, that we hit the ground running. It's hard to find stories like that.

    So yeah, definitely digging this.
    January 8th, 2016 at 04:07am
  • Divine  Faery

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    Well I can't say that I'm a fan of supernatural, I actually stopped watching a long time ago, I think I know what's going on now, but I probably missed everything between Lillith and the darkness.

    Any who, what I liked about this story is that it didn't waste anytime getting in there, usually the fan fictions I read drag things out with some very boring stuff. I also like bow you managed to do it without it seeming rushed at all, I have to say that's a major problem I usually see with these stories, it either starts off too slow or they seem to rush into the good stuff which then is kind of ruined by the rushed feeling.

    I didn't catch any mistakes so far, but I'll look over it again to make sure. Good Job!
    January 7th, 2016 at 03:07pm
  • divine;

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    I would first like to start off and say I don't know shit about SPN. Well, like, I know their names but I'm not sure of the intricate works woven into the show.

    With that, I feel like a good fanfiction is a fanfiction that can be appreciated by pretty much everyone. Whether it be someone clueless (like myself) or someone deeply into the show. Which is what you do very well.

    Your descriptions are very vivid and amazing. Give enough to fully visual in my head, but not overwhelming. And it works very well with the dialogue. Also love that it instantly dives into the action.

    Ah. Really good. This is well written and I wanna know what happened to Mickey and who the hell is responsible for it all and why.
    January 7th, 2016 at 05:28am
  • orange county.

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    I think was my favourite flashback so far! We got to see Mickey in action, which was awesome!

    I can't help but wonder how her relationships are going to progress with people. Not just the romantic ones, but also the tensions between her and her family members.
    January 6th, 2016 at 03:32pm
  • orange county.

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    You accidentally put in some of Thin Skin before the chapter.

    The actual chapter is great though, I thoroughly enjoy the flashbacks. I love that we're getting more of a sense of Mickey's relationships with the other characters as the story goes forward. Getting little chunks of information like this really works because it connects us to Mickey in the sense that she doesn't really know what's going on either. I can't wait to read more about the adventures she gets into.
    December 30th, 2015 at 11:57pm
  • Abmora01

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    was she dating Sam or Dean??
    December 28th, 2015 at 05:32am
  • orange county.

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    This is incredible. It's so dark and gritty, which is different from a lot of the stuff I read, and write, on here. As usual, your writing is absolutely captivating. Can't wait to see where this goes, and to delve more into Mickey's journey from med student to hunter.
    December 26th, 2015 at 03:01pm
  • shortygirl

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    Glad to see this is back. Hopefully more updates.
    December 16th, 2015 at 09:47pm
  • MizzHarvey5

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    I am so glad I found this story. You did such a good job with the characters! I really like Mickey. She fits in so well with the Supernatural family. I hope you update soon!
    August 4th, 2015 at 10:59pm
  • Kristenmae89

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    I've read all of this in the span of a day; I love this story and am excited for more!
    July 22nd, 2015 at 01:16pm
  • shortygirl

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    Mickey and Jo don't really get along do they? Loved the update
    June 16th, 2015 at 08:03am
  • bellamy blake

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    Wow, I feel like this was certainly a powerful opening chapter! I absolutely adored the almost atream-of-conscious style that you chose to write the first chapter in because I felt like that technique made me feel like I was completely immersed in that fight-or-flight situation that the main character was faced with as I was reading this. I also really admire the way you slowly unveiling the character’s surroundings and the physicality she was dealing with because that really built up the suspense for me. I also particularly enjoyed the cliffhanger ending to this chapter, which is something I generally kinda roll my eyes at, because I felt like it helped this story sort of mirror and mimick the style and format each episode of Supernatural is told through.

    As far as concrit is concerned, I don’t really have a ton of suggestions. I did notice a few grammatical errors, particularly involving your use of semi-colons where there should really be colons. The only other thing that kind of stood out to me was that there were definitely some places where the flow was kind of thrown off due to some awkward wording, but that’s nothing that can’t be easily edited.

    Overall, I really enjoyed this piece, and I wish you nothing but the best as you continue to work on it Cute
    June 7th, 2015 at 04:20am
  • shortygirl

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    I feel bad for Bobby, Jo, and Ellen.. Micky is trying but can't remember them to well.
    May 19th, 2015 at 10:38pm
  • shortygirl

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    What happened to Jo and Ellen? She really didn't talk to them after they left the hospital. Loved the updates
    May 16th, 2015 at 09:20pm
  • Albluerose

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    Oh wow the story has me right from the start, the description is amazing. I felt like she was 'Same girl' but I'm guessing she's deans, either way I love how well you described how they were feeling. When they found the demons, I figured it was demons. Why wouldn't it be demons, they are always demons! Ehem. Lol. Anyways, yeah Cas man, always has his way with words. I can't wait to see what happens with her memories coming back, hopefully they will be good memories and not all bad ones. Keeo up the great work, can't wait for the next update.
    May 16th, 2015 at 12:06am
  • shortygirl

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    Cas has a way of making awkward situations worse. Lol angel of the lord...
    May 15th, 2015 at 05:09am
  • shortygirl

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    Of course they were demons. Demons seem to forget they have the colt and Ruby's knife.
    May 12th, 2015 at 07:07pm
  • orange county.

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    Ahh! I can't wait for the story to progress now that Jo, Dean and Sam are off to go get the guys that hurt Mickey. One thing I noticed when reading was that you repeated a paragraph: “Sam,” he said, his voice gruff", to, "“Can I talk to you?” And another thing was that you wrote, "or great her as a stranger", instead of greet. Both accidental typo-like stuff. As usual, the writing itself can not be flawed.
    April 28th, 2015 at 08:54pm
  • shortygirl

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    Poor Ellen.. that probably broke her heart. Hopefully she remembers something soon.
    April 28th, 2015 at 06:56am