this is so cute thus far! i now have an inane desire for Patrick Stump to speak more French in his (and my) life. the flow feels prequel/part one ish instead of a chapter, ya know? like if you want to just round things up, a part two involving Patrick coming to America and the pair randomly running into each other would be a tad cliche, but your dialogue seems refreshing enough to offer an original spin on it :) on the other hand you could easily make this last for a few more installments of star crossed stupid boys lost in translation. i'd be down for reading. and even if you can't figure more out, what you've written thus far is lovely too.
the flow feels prequel/part one ish instead of a chapter, ya know? like if you want to just round things up, a part two involving Patrick coming to America and the pair randomly running into each other would be a tad cliche, but your dialogue seems refreshing enough to offer an original spin on it :)
on the other hand you could easily make this last for a few more installments of star crossed stupid boys lost in translation. i'd be down for reading. and even if you can't figure more out, what you've written thus far is lovely too.