This was beyond adorable! Ugh, I loved the storyline from top to bottom. Your characters were well developed, your descriptions were good and overall, this story is so honest that it makes it so much easier for it to be super relatable! I love how you include so much of the character's thoughts and the various questions and wonders that they have about things and people. This makes your writing real. One thing that you can improve is your spelling, but it's only here and there and nothing that proofreading once or twice cannot fix. Great job!
November 4th, 2015 at 10:06am