Breathing Under Water - Comments

  • error404

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    This was beyond adorable! Ugh, I loved the storyline from top to bottom. Your characters were well developed, your descriptions were good and overall, this story is so honest that it makes it so much easier for it to be super relatable! I love how you include so much of the character's thoughts and the various questions and wonders that they have about things and people. This makes your writing real. One thing that you can improve is your spelling, but it's only here and there and nothing that proofreading once or twice cannot fix. Great job!
    November 4th, 2015 at 10:06am
  • SadNight

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    Keep up the updates, I love reading about what's happening next. You're story is realistic and I enjoy it very much =)
    September 20th, 2015 at 05:28pm
  • Yummy Octopie

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    I really love this. I especially love the issues that Lilly has with her body. I personally have body issues, and I like that Lilly has them, too. It makes readers relate to her character in a way that's really cool. I also like the other characters. Sean is adorable and Clark reminds me of that one guy in high school that you really hate, but he's funny so you deal with him. Anyway, I'm really enjoying this! And I look forward to reading more!

    B x
    May 27th, 2015 at 04:49am
  • kipderder

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    This is pretty awesome. It's got a nice, easy flow to it and I'm loving all of the characters. Very interested to see what happens next.
    May 12th, 2015 at 06:32am
  • BrittanyMorgan

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    Story is great! To answer your question... a chapter from Lilly's POV would be awesome!
    May 12th, 2015 at 06:19am