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  • saeglopur

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    So the first chapter definitely does a good job of pulling me in and making me interested. It leaves enough to be desired that I wan to read more, and am confused but not completely mind boggled that I walk away. I think that you should definitely give some background on HYDRA and important information that anyone who hasn't seen the movie would be able to follow this, because I did find myself a little lost as I read on. I noticed a typo in the second chapter "He placed a hand up to stop me from soeaking," I think you meant to put a p in the place of that o. Also some of the chapters kind of felt like empty space. Like chapter four could either be apart of another chapter or left out completely. It seems like this is a more action-type story so chapter four seems misplaced among, like it doesn't really quite belong. But these are just one person's opinions so you don't even have to listen to me! Good luck with the rest of your writing :)
    May 28th, 2015 at 10:15pm
  • Bangarang!

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    This story started with a bang and I loved it. I like the fact that the first chapter was action packed. It had a slight mysterious note to it about how the two had memories together. The ending of chapter one definitely was interesting leaving the reader in the unknown. I loved the integration of the Avengers in the second chapter, as well as the memory of the main character and Bucky. I really enjoyed your portrayal of Bucky and the main character seems like a BAMF and I really like her but I want to know more about her past with Bucky I am very intrigued to see where you take this.
    In the first two chapters I noticed there were a few spelling mistakes but if you had a quick skim over them I am sure you would find them, other then that this is a really interesting and well written story.
    May 27th, 2015 at 10:12am
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    *double post*
    May 27th, 2015 at 10:11am
  • Katie Mosing

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    I think this story is off to a good start! I like how the first chapter started out with some action with the and left off with a cliffhanger. Wondering whether or not the main character got shot and trying to figure out how she got knocked out are great ways to get them to come back and check out the second chapter. I like that you made your portrayal of Bucky sort of mysterious. We know that he is bad, but we can see that he is good, too, because he spared her in the first chapter when he didn't have to. I think it will be interesting to figure out what exactly is going on with Bucky and what motivated him to do his good little deed. One thing I think this story could benefit from is a little bit longer chapters, but that's no big deal! Another thing I noticed is I don't think you ever said the main character's name. I don't know if that was intentional or not though.
    May 26th, 2015 at 06:04am
  • sabrini98_

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    Oh this is going to be an interesting story
    May 26th, 2015 at 01:50am
  • kim wonshik.

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    Action packed right from the start, which is always a solid way to start off any story! Cute The way you write the first chapter has got a good solid flow. Because there's tension from her struggling to get away, you write the sentences pretty short and to the point, which allows the reader to kinda feel the pace of what's taking place. You write it out so smooth, but still give it enough details to envision the scene. Great job with that because I don't think it's something that's easily done! And you also keep upping the tension as you bring out more information - especially with the mention of HYDRA. And the ending definitely leaves the reader wanting more!

    I think that you're doing a great job so far with this. It really captures the attention of the reader and keeps it! Great job!
    May 9th, 2015 at 11:04pm
  • paperweight

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    Looking forwrd to seeing where this is going. Please update soon!
    May 2nd, 2015 at 08:29am
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    May 2nd, 2015 at 08:27am