So the first chapter definitely does a good job of pulling me in and making me interested. It leaves enough to be desired that I wan to read more, and am confused but not completely mind boggled that I walk away. I think that you should definitely give some background on HYDRA and important information that anyone who hasn't seen the movie would be able to follow this, because I did find myself a little lost as I read on. I noticed a typo in the second chapter "He placed a hand up to stop me from soeaking," I think you meant to put a p in the place of that o. Also some of the chapters kind of felt like empty space. Like chapter four could either be apart of another chapter or left out completely. It seems like this is a more action-type story so chapter four seems misplaced among, like it doesn't really quite belong. But these are just one person's opinions so you don't even have to listen to me! Good luck with the rest of your writing :)
May 28th, 2015 at 10:15pm