Perfectly Imperfect - Comments

So to start, the layout is lovely. The colors make it easy to read and the simplicity of it doesn't draw away from the story.
The summary really drew me in and made me want to read more. I feel for Frost; it's sad how his parents treat him. Like they care but don't at the same time. Its hard for me to find words for it; like he's just a show pony to trot around and he's doing his best to be that figurative show pony as not to displease them. Spencer seems like he's going to loosen Frost up though and maybe lighten his view of everything and that he might not stand for his parents disinterest in him. I'm getting a sense of foreboding though, like something pivotal is going to happen and somehow it will tie into Frost's accident.
I love the way this is written, though the dialogue sounds like it's something more out of the 1800s than current time. Though I'm sure it has to do with the formal setting of everything, though it just reads odd I guess.

The summary really drew me in. It made me wonder what kind of story this would be and what Frost Hillary meant about the other children obeying their parents. There was something in the way the summary was worded that made me feel like the kids obeying their parents wasn't in the normal way kids listen to their parents - like maybe they were someone being forced to. I don't know, but I'm interested in finding out.

Bunch of stuttering Stanleys here. So far, this is pretty interesting. Between his parents weird behavior, the accident (and the changes from the accident) and Spencer, it looks like something crazy has happened to (or is going to happen to) Frost.

I really like the pace of this story so far. I like that you're introducing characters slowly and one at a time, so at the end of the chapters, even if I've met five new people, I can still remember them each distinctly.

The only thing that stood out (in a bad way) to me was that some of the dialogue seemed a little unnatural. Even though the characters (like Frost, his parents, and their associates) have a very formal way of speaking, I think the way they talk should still sound flow a little better and sound more like what people would say in everyday conversation. There are a lot of places, especially during the part where they're at the fancy party, where the language sounds forced or scripted. I think if that were fixed up a bit, the story would be perfect.

Frost Hillary:
I really like how he was basically comparing himself to the painting that he did; there was an imperfection on the painting - a smudge of paint - and on himself - the scar from the accident I suppose. And the fact that he is expected to be as perfect as he can be is just too much for him, especially being so sheltered from the world.

An accident? What kind of accident changes the color of his eyes and hair? Maybe it wasn't an accident at all, whatever it was. Maybe it was completely on purpose... for some reason. Maybe it's a curse or something, or a myth, or MAYBE HE'S NOT REALLY THEIR SON.

It makes me so mad that his parents are basically trying to hide him from the world until they really need him to be seen, I guess to show everyone that he's still alive and growing. I feel that his parents just treat him like an accessory after the accident, maybe because they are just too ashamed that something so horrible, that I don't even know what it is, could happen to their son and to their family.

Spencer Brennan:
Gosh, having your life basically planned for you sucks. I mean, Spencer doesn't really get to do anything that he wants to; he doesn't get to have fun, it doesn't seem like he has any friends, and he just doesn't seem too close with anyone. He grew up so... stuffy I would say, but not quite.

On the inside, I feel that he doesn't want to take the place of his father since he really didn't have a say in it, but maybe a little part of him has accepted that it's what he was born to do and that's the only thing that he must do for the rest of his life... And that's just boring. I mean, if I was him, I would find my life so boring.

Did he actually go away to study or did his parents send him away because he was rebelling too much? Hmmm. Who knows, but maybe the two go hand-in-hand.

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I love how radically different the two guys are, with their personalities and their backgrounds and stuff, but while they are different, I feel that they are somehow the same. I feel that both don't have much of a say what happens in their lives and maybe they'll do something to change that. I don't know.

Anyway, to conclude this, I want to say that I absolutely love this story even though I only got through the first two chapters. But I will continue to read it and follow it to see what happens!

I'm surprised that this doesn't have more comments, both authors parts are well written and the way you both hold the readers attention is awesome. The detail in this is good and it flows smoothly from one chapter to the next, even though the chapters are different POV's... good job with this.

I found this story by the thread on the my mibba.
I was already blown away by the summary; the way you write is just very compelling. I truly mean that and I'm not sure why there are no comments yet...

This is what I think is missing from Mibba. Fanfiction gets a lot of attention and that isn't necessarily a bad thing, its just that there are a lot of very good written stories like these, which,... get overlooked I feel.

Just happy I found this one! Yaay for the thread.

Now on with the feedback; You are very descriptive and I like the connections you make for example between the canvas and the boy. I also give you credit for making me wonder what the change of hair and eye color has to do with his parents being overprotected.

Giving the readers just enough wonder and just enough information; a great writers trait!

One little nitpicking; I usually find it nice to while reading, when a conversation line is on a new row. (if you understand what I mean, Sorry im dutch).

Other than that small little thing, this is a great story with a lovely layout.

I found this story by the thread on the my mibba.
I was already blown away by the summary; the way you write is just very compelling. I truly mean that and I'm not sure why there are no comments yet...

This is what I think is missing from Mibba. Fanfiction gets a lot of attention and that isn't necessarily a bad thing, its just that there are a lot of very good written stories like these, which,... get overlooked I feel.

Just happy I found this one! Yaay for the thread.

Now on with the feedback; You are very descriptive and I like the connections you make for example between the canvas and the boy. I also give you credit for making me wonder what the change of hair and eye color has to do with his parents being overprotected.

Giving the readers just enough wonder and just enough information; a great writers trait!

One little nitpicking; I usually find it nice to while reading, when a conversation line is on a new row. (if you understand what I mean, Sorry im dutch).

Other than that small little thing, this is a great story with a lovely layout.