June 21st, 2015 at 12:10am
There is such a definitive feel to this story, I don't think I've ever read anything like it. The way you describe things just paints the clearest picture, down to every detail, no pun intended. I also really like how you integrated the backstory so effortlessly into the chapter. I had had a feeling that her mother wasn't going to be apart of the story, but I'm actually sad that that is the case. The way Charlotte talks about her, you can just tell that she meant everything to her.
The ending of the chapter is just perfect. It pushes people to click next, if they could.
You say you're just trying, but dear, this is doing. Congrats
I'm curious to see how it happens, how the characters unravel. I think its an awesome first chapter and I cannot wait to stop back and read more. There is a lot of meaning and more story to learn and read about and it's exciting.
I also agree with vv Michael Westen. Honey, you are doing an incredible job so far with this story and I hope you continue to update it.