January 12th, 2016 at 06:02am
The summary basically drew me in instantaneously because I already felt like some serious saucy stuff was gonna go down! Okay I'm gonna break down the comment into chapter by chapter!
Your description already is wonderful, I can tell you're a fantastic writer. It was interesting the way you put small memories into descriptions, like how they'd adopt a dog someday, or their dreams of meeting for lunch. It's so realistic and down to earth that it makes me believe in the characters. And the way that you describe something as dreary as a work shift waiting tables, somehow adds to the character and what kind of person they are.
You really brought Lucas in with a bang too! It was awesome! Your description of him already spells out how I'm supposed to feel about him and what we're meant to think. Anyway, just a last thought that your characters have so much personality, it's wonderful!
I can only guess that the people at table 25 are Zack and his family, but, of course, I could be wrong. And I really hope that I'm wrong. Well, I'm glad that it isn't Zack, but I suppose this guy is a lot worse, even if we really don't know why or what he's done. I think this is my favorite description out of the second (third?) chapter. It made me laugh.
Ahh, I can see why she doesn't like Lucas. Just reading about him leaves a bad taste in my mouth. But I do wonder why they requested her table. But hey, at least the other two guys didn't seem much trouble, they seemed a lot nicer than Lucas, that's for sure.
I can already tell you that I really like this story! I've subscribed to it just to see what happens in the other chapters, and any chapter yet to come.