July 2nd, 2015 at 04:32pm
I don't think I've ever read a story that retold the story of Adam and Eve, and I really like that you did it in drabble form! It was a really cool glimpse into the infamous moment, and it was really easy to focus on the situation with how simple and clear it was.
One thing I noticed:
Adam did the same mistake, and then, God’s fury fell upon them.
I feel like "Adam made" instead of "Adam did" would sound a little less awkward. Just my opinion though!
Very lovely drabble!
The ending is also quite great, and not only because of the truth it has. It just reaffirms everything already written.
You did wonderful. Definitely deserve every recommendation you've gotten for this, including mine.