Overdose - Comments

  • warmaiden

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    i like the story that flows together. it's so short yet packed w/ all this detail & horror you'd never want to comprehend bc of how heartbreaking it is. starting from this woman losing her parents to selling herself on the streets to rid herself of such pain, i felt it. the harsh truth for every addict who are treated all the same
    July 6th, 2015 at 07:40am
  • silent hearts.

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    There is so much described in this that it's difficult to take in. There's a whole life in such a short story. I love how it fits with the idea of an overdose - feeling too much all at once. This is a very brash kind of sad. There are no lies in this story, just a harsh story.
    July 1st, 2015 at 04:08am
  • losing control.

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    I really like the simplicity of this. There was a lot of information and heavy content in this, especially because you're talking about someone overdosing, but it all came out really simply which was nice.

    I think it would have been nice to have a bit more emotion in it, just because you are talking about addiction and what not, but that’s hard to do in such a small amount of words.

    Good job!
    June 16th, 2015 at 10:11pm
  • vaguethoughts

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    Double comment! Sorry :( Internet's slow so I hit the submit twice
    June 13th, 2015 at 05:07pm
  • vaguethoughts

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    I love how this came out to be simple. Amidst the limited number of words you were able to make it compelling as you took what might be the perspective of a person before or while having an overdose. I’m most likely to check your other works, keep it up!
    June 13th, 2015 at 05:05pm
  • vaguethoughts

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    I love how this came out to be simple. Amidst the limited number of words you were able to make it compelling as you took what might be the perspective of a person before or while having an overdose. I’m most likely to check your other works, keep it up!
    June 13th, 2015 at 04:59pm