Pain - Comments

I'm with losing control on this one. I feel like, putting the banner and the last sentence together, she killed him or maybe even the mistress rather than the typical "I did what I could to no avail so I'm accepting defeat", because I felt this strength and anger and betrayal in the tone of the story and I think all three of those combined could lead to a murder. There was just so much anger and I could feel it, but (and perhaps it really is my imagination) I thought I saw a few implications of something more, something actually murderous. Either way, even if not, this was so well done because I felt everything she did in just 100 words and that's damn impressive. You did such a fantastic job with this, I loved it.

i really liked the honesty of these feelings, that hint of betrayal from a first pov. it's like that moment of heartbreak almost everyone feels @ some moment in their life from a lover.

a reader like myself stepping into the shoes of this nameless character & getting a taste of her pain is definite w/ the sacrifices she's made to accompany her husband's needs (ex: god knows how hard i tried to win him back: make-up, better clothes, changing oneself - i love that)

also the ending line: i hope she was worth it; like accepting defeat but throwing out this line as if claiming there wouldn't be happiness he'd feel/realize until he let her go.

Aw, this is so sad.

I really liked your first line. It set the tone for the drabble really nicely, and you kept it up through the whole thing. I also like the angle you took on the word "pain". You pretty much could have written about anything, but I liked what you chose.

Also, I dunno if it was the banner or what, but I feel like she killed him or something. Maybe that's just me being weird

Two things:
But no avail.
I think there should be a "to" between "but" and "no".

I tried wearing make-up, better clothes, and I changed whatever I can for him.
"I changed whatever I could for him".

Great job!