All of Me - Comments

  • lilynotlyla

    lilynotlyla (100)

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    Another really cute premise. The biggest thing I would say is more showing as far as emotions go. Don't be afraid of getting more in depth with your descriptions and non-dialogue. Nice job with the time crunch!
    June 28th, 2015 at 11:24pm
  • lilynotlyla

    lilynotlyla (100)

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    Another really cute premise. The biggest thing I would say is more showing as far as emotions go. Don't be afraid of getting more in depth with your descriptions and non-dialogue. Nice job with the time crunch!
    June 28th, 2015 at 11:24pm