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  • Ghoul Scouts

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    Very intriguing drabble. I loved how you described the lights. I was very interested in how aliens were abducting the main character. I wish it was a bit longer and described more of what the alines were doing to him.
    But overall it was still very good.
    July 7th, 2017 at 04:05am
  • nearly witches.

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    Layout / Summary
    Layout is simple, lovely and readable, so that's a bonus. Your summary had me so curious, because I'm totally one of these kinds of people who is into weird things, so I was really into seeing what you were alluding to here.

    Content
    So I'm a bit of a conspiracy nut and I am 100% of the belief that alien abductions can and have happened, so I was so buzzing to figure out that this was what the whole thing was about. I love, however, the fact that you don't actually ever mention the word alien. This is all open to interpretation -- the 'lights' could be anything, and I love that. It lets the readers draw their own conclusions about the ending, and about what happens to the man mentioned. The entire story has this eerie, almost ominous feel to it for me. I love that, no matter how many times it happens, the man is still scared of the lights, still worried about what might happen. It's almost like a metaphor for the bad things in life -- we can know they're coming all we want, but we'll never be able to stop being scared. This just adds that creepiness into the whole idea of uncertainty. I love it.

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    My only complaint is that this isn't longer, ha!

    Overall
    This was such a wonderful little piece. I'd love to learn more about what happens, but at the same time, I think this works so well as a short piece. Suspenseful, impactful and well-written. Nice job!
    October 2nd, 2016 at 02:19pm
  • Juno

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    This is very interesting.
    I find it intriguing how your word use depicts light as darkness. Very nice. This is good.

    A.
    October 13th, 2015 at 04:46pm
  • kim wonshik.

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    I think you started this off great by making the first sentence, "The lights would haunt him forever." It immediately sets a sort of chilling, ominous mood for the story which is furthered and added on to with the rest of it. I also like how it doesn't go any further than calling the abduction what it is. Instead, it keeps referring to it as just the lights, which is super creepy in my own opinion because there's an air of mystery around it since it doesn't say what it is (even though you can guess what it is) and then you also have some connotation with the term "the light" because of the expressions of "going towards the light" and such. Then you can see the damage this has done to him. Not only is he scared of these lights, but he's also lost some actual ability to keep track of time.

    The way you end it is nicely done as well. He knows what's going to happen and he's powerless to stop it, so he can only really be overcome with fear.

    Great job on this!
    October 6th, 2015 at 07:03pm
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    October 6th, 2015 at 07:03pm
  • silent hearts.

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    I love the ebb and flow of this one. It's like you can tell that he really is afraid, but he understands just how inevitable it is that he'll be taken. You build a sense of heightened anxiety through this piece that flows through the character and into the reader. I would certainly be interested in reading a longer piece about this (although I understand this is for the Drabble-a-Thon).
    July 1st, 2015 at 03:29am