Survivor's Guilt - Comments

I love how well you get into your character’s mind. The prologue was interesting. The first line made me think, “Okay, she seems guilty. She probably murdered her or forced her to crash.” With that being said, I thought I was reading about a person who committed a crime, and the thought process of their deed. But the more I read on, reading Maura’s thoughts, I realized that she didn’t mean to do it. It happened so quickly, and all Maura could think about is the fact that whatever she decided to tell her, it killed her best friend.

Reading chapter two was nice. I loved the idea of incorporating the small flashback to help us understand more about Maura and her deep feelings for her best friend.

Her lover’s death is like a anchor pulling her away from clean air, and she’s like a motor boat, moving quickly trying to find safety or survival. But instead of moving quickly, Maura tends to pause, slow down, and think of her death, becoming guilty of her friend’s death yet again. Her mindset is definitely unique, frightening, but unique.

In Maura’s eyes, her mother seems like the one against the odds. But who knows, set a side Maura’s clouded view, her mother could be genially trying to help Maura move on, or even get better.

This story is filled with heavy feelings, deep meaning and loads of creativity. Please keep doing what you’re doing.

Lol I was listening to I Won't Mind by Zayn Malik while reading this and it kinda goes. But I'm only two chapters in and I gotta say that I'm loving the simplicity of this, in terms of your writing. I wasn't fond of the layout when I first clicked on this, but it actually goes well with it, so now I'm starting to like it. But I love the plot of this a lot and even though it's the 'I love my best friend" trope, I'm liking how you're going about it and it's very cute. I feel so bad for Maura, esp her friend's mother, wtf who says that to someone??? But anywho, onto reading some more...

this chapter is important -- i feel -- for several reasons. we see the protective nature of maura's mother, but you also see the flawed aspect within maura. i felt a bit of contrast between the two in this chapter, to be honest. maura's mother is more... realistic, perhaps. maura, however, has this massive weight of guilt which is driving her to a slow death. the mother's outburst showed a bit of reality to the situation -- maura is creating a dream of a hero's death, in a sense, i feel. anyway, out of this chapter, my favorite line was, "Fire burns through my veins like it hasn't in weeks, and I return her glare." it just resonated with me on account of the fact maura is not only feeling guilt at this point -- but anger as well. stages of denial, yo. can't wait to read more!

Dear God this is amazing.
The idea.
The plot line.
The way that you write Maura's thoughts and portray her inner struggle.
It's all so amazing! Especially the fact that you give hints but leave out certain details to keep the reader wanting to read more.
I can't wait for the next chapter. <3

dang, this is something i'm really excited for. honestly, your writing style kind of reminds me of something similar to poetry, it just flows. strangely enough, your writing style also reminds me of laurie halse anderson... which i love, considering she is one of my all time favorite authors. though, i want to know more about maura. she seems to be carrying such a heavy load, and it's already taking quite a toll on her. you convey how she feels so picturesque, i can almost feel the anguish. honestly, i can't wait to read more

The first line of the prologue got me hooked already which is a really good thing. Many stories I've read didn't get me hooked rapidly, but yours did. I love how we can feel the main character's emotions. I love how you portrayed Maura and many people will be able to relate to her. How hard it can be to keep such a big secret, to know that you somehow caused the death of someone you loved. It's hard to read how guilty she feels and how horrible it must be to be her at the moment. I don't know how I would react if that ever happened to me. You are an exellent writer, using beautiful words and not making major spelling or grammar errors. I can't wait to read more chapters of this story. It's already great and I'm sure it's still going to be.