On a Grey Sky Morning - Comments

I was wondering if the title of this was a reference to that song; it's my jams. It makes for good songfic type stuff, too.
So, I don't normally read this sort of fic, and I don't normally read fic in this fandom, especially Draco-centered fic, so this was a nice read for me because it was something a little different.
I really like the tone of this piece. I'm a real sucker for gloomy rainy weather corresponding with gloomy dark moods in writing. You've done a good job of establishing this feel. You also did a good job of describing Draco's emotions; I can really feel what he feels and that keeps me sucked into the story.
There were a few small errors I found via nitpicking:
She was one of the few people he ever called by their first name, so even though he sounded like something had just crawled up his ass and died, she knew that his tone meant nothing. --This isn't technically wrong or anything, but I found the phrasing of it awkward and unfitting with the tone of voice used by the rest of the narration. It reads more like dialogue than narration to me.
And as he continued on his way towards shelter, he could already feel the wetness seep through his layers of clothing even though only having been out for not even a few minutes.--This sentence I found to be really wordy and awkward to read. I had to read it a few times to figure out its meaning.

Overall, despite a few small issues and despite being different from my usual reading choices, this was a nice read. Keep up the good work!

Hi, I’m here from my candy bowl! First, I like your background image of the birds in flight. It’s just kind of peaceful, even though you have memories raging through this whole one-shot! You have a few small grammar things like ...stopping the girl in his tracks... I think you mean her tracks and again here he saw here there I'm pretty sure you mean her. Other than that though, I think you did an excellent job writing this. Draco’s emotions come over well, and even though he wasn’t my favorite character, I did find myself rooting for him in the end. I love how we don’t actually meet Blake until the ending, but her memories in Draco’s mind give you a good idea of who she is. The only thing that caught me off guard with this story is that in Draco’s last memory you say, After all they had been through and done together, what made her want to end their relationship? You don’t really explain too much about what they went through together. You tell us how they met and some good times, but that line makes me think they had some rough patches too, and I would’ve maybe liked one memory of that. But you’re probably right for leaving it out, this was a pretty long one-shot :) but it was definitely worth it. Thanks for recommending it.

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I completely sympathize with Draco, rainy days are the worst about bringing up painful memories. I absolutely loved this story. Seeing Draco so emotional and like an actual human was great and a really nice insight into their world. I also like how this is the one Draco fan fic I've stumbled upon in that isn't about his hatred of Harry: generally if it isn't the main part of the story it is still a sub plot, but here it's hardly even mentioned. Which is a nice change. The story did move a bit quickly, but the flashbacks seem to give all the insight needed into what happened and why he reacts this way to the weather. The only thing I'd change is more insight into what Blake is like. What does she look like, how is she as a person, what exactly is it that makes her so special that so long after they broke up Malfoy still can't stand anything that brings back memories? We know Malfoy but we come into this knowing nothing about Blake so we have to be told that.
Other than that I absolutely loved this story and it's so well written!

Woot woot! Why does this not have more comments? :( Your description is great in this I love detail and I like the way you switched between present and memory... It allowed the reader to see how much the relationship meant to him.

Woot woot! Why does this not have more comments? :( Your description is great in this I love detail and I like the way you switched between present and memory... It allowed the reader to see how much the relationship meant to him.

This was absolute perfection. I was wondering what happened to me in the beginning, I'm just glad you didn't like kill me I loved this. Everything about it, although I may be being a bit biased. Alex's appearance literally made me grin soooo hard. That was great. Fantastic