Gods and Monsters - Comments

Wow what an emotional rollercoaster, I honestly don’t know how to feel for Draco. I want to believe he’s a good guy but it’s just so hard. I’m glad that he hasn’t reverted back to his old ways, but now she’s starting to feel something towards Neville. I hope to see a new update in the near future, I really need to know what’s going to happen during the party.

Yessss! Even for a filler I loveeeed it. Update again soon!

are you going to keep writing? (:

This update was worth the wait! So good, can't wait for the next one<3

You NEED to update! Read this a few months ago and have been dying for an update!

Your** not our sorry :D

Your** not our sorry :D

Started reading our story this week and OH MY GOD I love it!!! You are a brilliant writer and I hope you post a new chapter soon! Cheers xo

ugh please write more

I would just like to start this comment off with saying I miss being able to comment on chapters individually. I hate to spoil it for other people (by accident, of course).

This story development from the character(s) is great! I truly adore how the story takes more form in the development and unveilling of characters, as well as actual plot occurrences. I'm glad that you've picked this story back up! It was quite enthralling and detailed to give up on.

One piece of constructive chatter: a couple of sentences I found a bit repetative, either within itself or in the context of the paragraph. I'm not 100% certain that it's not just my tired eyes though.

I do look forward to you posting more and what develops of the story! I'm masochistically looking forward to what wickedness will stem from this new story twist. I am ready to hate on her and Draco, which will probably want me to throw my laptop against a pillow, but it will all cause me to love this story (and Draco) so much more.

Hi, new reader. So excited.

I don't know how helpful or encouraging you'll receive my comment, but first and foremost: the six chapters I've read so far are terribly exciting!

I am adoring the dynamic of Draco you have. He's cruel half the time and just so endearing the other half, you go along with Ana's mental/emotional roller coaster of him. Sometimes you want to believe Draco's this genuinely good guy, but then something happens that makes him do something so polar.

I think it has been pointed out already in other commentors, but there are a few grammatical mistakes that a little proof-read wouldn't hurt. But that's just me being terribly picky about grammar.

Neville, such a sweetheart. I love that you picked him to be her salvation. He's often forgotten about because he borders on Hufflepuff. I really hope no harm comes to him, but a little bit of me does. It'll just make things take a whole other turn for the three characters, and maybe Draco can come to realise a side of him that he wasn't fully aware of. I don't know; I'm merely spit-balling.

I do look forward to how the relationship grows though - both with Neville and Draco. I'm rooting for Draco, personally.

And bravo on the NC-17 chapter! Well done! It's hard to find good smut nowadays. You wrote it well. And it does blur the line of Draco's personality and their feelings for each other. But sex tends to do that in reality too.

Can't wait for your next chapter! Bravo!

I'm liking the summary, it's always great when song lyrics line up with a story you're writing. I love me some Draco so I'm excited for this

Alright, I'm only a chapter in so far but I'm gonna leave a comment before I continue on. Just once I want Draco to not be an asshole seriously though, I think you did a really good job at making Draco seem really dangerous and creepy. The flashbacks worked really well too, like we knew what he had done but didn't have to believe it because it was never actually said.

There were some punctuation issues that I noticed, so I would suggest reading through the chapter again and fixing those up. There were also a few times I noticed where the dialogue didn't really match up with the character. Like when the mothers were speaking, sometimes it would be very formal and other times it wasn't as much, which didn't really match up. If that makes sense.

Other than that though, this story seems fantastic and I'm really excited to see what happens! And if Neville plays a part because he's on you story page Great job!

First off, I'd like to compliment you on your layout. It is simple and doesn't distract from the reading. Personally, I'm not a fan of a black box with colored text, but you chose a color that isn't too harsh, so I appreciate that. As for your summary, it definitely pulls me in. I really like when people use song lyrics that relate to the story as the hook. I also appreciate the disclaimer warning about what's to come. So few people do that and blindside the reader with hardcore sex and violence. Thank you.

Chapter One:
Small mistake in the first paragraph: ...within the next two days IF she kept interrupting...

Ooh... I sense a loooot of tension. He obviously did something to her, and I'm pretty sure I'm going to want to strangle him if my idea is right. Little sneak is playing dumb...

FUCK! I HATE BEING RIGHT! I WANT TO KILL DRACO! I will say that I do enjoy this take on him. Most people romanticize him (myself included) and make him a victim, but you are portraying him as a villain, at least in this chapter, like he is. He has problematic behaviour because of how he was raised and you are capturing that, quite well.

The only small mistakes that I saw were commas that needed to be put in a couple spots, but that's not a huge deal. Overall, this is an AMAZING start to this story. I will definitely be reading more. I want to see how this unfolds and what Draco does to Ana and if he ever has a change of heart and how she'll react (preferably rejecting him b/c strong women, but obviously you are the author, so you call the shots and know your OC better than anyone)

Keep up the great work!

Wow!
So as I start reading I thought this would be the normal type of Draco story, but man did you blow my mind. This is a completely different version if Draco that I have ever read, I don't know if I want to punch him in the nose or idk.

But I don't know if you put any warnings, I probably wasn't paying attention. If you didn't please make sure you get something in there, only because I am a victim of physical and emotional abuse, so when I started reading it I was kinda like "oh god, the memories".

However I was able to connect with the original character, because I know the feeling. I know how she feels so that's why I kept reading it. I didn't focus on if you made any errors, I'm not a grammar/spelling natzi lol :)

All in all you did a great job at this, I love the ending of the last chapter about how he found the note. I really do wonder what will happen, I will be subscribing to this and recommendating it. :)

Edit- I see you put graphic violence. It didn't register with me for some reason, i usually think of like horror type stuff or ass kicking lol.

so good keep writing please? :)

This is so stressful I kinda can't deal with it and Thursday needs to come now. I love Draco so much and this makes him so scary and I just can't.