The Silver Three - Comments

ivylyn (100)

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Hi there! I'm commenting in hopes that you'll update once more. This is a lovely store and I'm just falling in love with all the characters, especially Eleanor. She's remarkable and I'm dying to see where her relationship goes with Draco. So this is me pleading and begging that you'll find some energy and inspiration to finish this story.

August 22nd, 2017 at 06:59pm

LaniLoser (100)

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yes please keep updating please. finish the story. i love it

May 3rd, 2016 at 06:00pm

notllamadelrey (100)

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This is the second time I've read this and it's still amazing. Please update!

May 2nd, 2016 at 09:31pm

Oldjane (150)

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This is amazing! I read through the entire thing like a breeze! Wow, I loved it!

January 11th, 2016 at 09:57pm

pocahontas. (565)

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To say I'm excited for this would be an understatement. Due to the number of chapters, I'll be doing a live review where I comment as I read. Your summary and the photos are phenomenal. Only in a Harry Potter story would I click that many links

And thank you for the warning. I'm sure there are a few readers who really appreciate that!

Chapter 1: There is a lot of parents = There are // rolling of the tongue = rolling off // I really love how you've taken to writing a character who isn't canon and also isn't a "good guy" ~ The idea of a lead female being the antagonist is something I'm really drawn too; especially since you're starting from first year!

Chapter 2: Professor Snap drones = Snape // "I tuck these secrets like daggers away for later." Yes! This is such a good sentence. This is a leading line, a tag line type. You describe people amazingly, in a way that brings them to life without going overboard on details.

Chapter 3: Absolutely perfect in way of grammar, spelling, etc. Also in clever remarks and wording. I only wish this was longer so I could get to know more of Blaise and what he said to show Eleanor how smart he is.

Chapter 4: in the right time in the right place. = The phrase is actually "in the right place at the right time"

The way you portray a loss and everything that comes with it is phenomenal. I also like the critique of the Golden Trio and their luck...that's not something I'd have ever really thought about.

Chapter 5: This seems to be one of the most telling chapters so far, if my assumptions are correct. The detail of 'yours' vs 'sincerely' in Draco's letter are a nice touch. Hecate also seems a fitting name in any form for a story about witchcraft, just as a blood swear on something simple seems fitting of Slytherin.

Chapter 6: Purple, red, and black to describe bruises makes it stand out how you don't use the Oxford comma. I was always taught to use it in lists but I'm not sure if it's in AP style so I won't be correcting them for your story. This is a chapter that's perfect short. Each word is necessary and holds a lot of power. I agree this was necessary, as well as wonderfully written if that's the right descriptor. Viktor not even talking to her after all the effort is also very realistic of life in general; effort is not always rewarded as it should be.

Chapter 7: when father is home = was home (since your sentence is past tense) // Mostly this seems like a filler. Though there don't seem to be necessary details here, I do like that more seems to be revealed about your little trio. This is one of those chapters that would also be very helpful to readers who aren't Potter fans, so well done.

Chapter 8: Poppy Kingston is a great name. This reminds me of what Eleanor said about last names in the first chapter. Your writing is very consistent and your names all work so well together with existing story names. (Or was Poppy a canon character that I don't remember? Oops) This seems to be the first true showing of antagonism; and in a way many would consider bullying, and not traits a main character should have. I think this side to her makes it all the more realistic on all sides. The strong chapter end is also something I love.

Chapter 9: Another good filler for those who aren't as familiar with the series. Seeing that Eleanor is also fixated on blood purity is something that catches me by surprise while at the same time being something I expected all along.

Chapter 10: happen to them = happen to him // Writing 12 year olds as vulnerable children is such a drastic change from what I usually read, and from the series itself. This chapter brings a whole new level to Draco's character while still being canon.

Chapter 11: the buses that we push through = bushes // father away = farther // The way you detail the party makes it seem so vivid and easy to immerse myself in. Bravo for such a long chapter. I also like that you've added more to Draco's character, and how you've made his mother and Eleanor's seem complete opposites. You finish the chapter with a fine spectacle that had me on the edge of my seat. Wrapping the detection stone into it was a nice touch, too.

Chapter 12: off of the way = out of // a vile of something = vial // rose macaroons = Did you mean macarons? // Inclusion of wandless fighting seemed odd to me, because what about wandless magic? But just as everything else so far, you have a poetic way of making things seem like something brilliant ol' JK would have done. I thought at 11, perhaps it was normal to have a human caretaker. At 14 to see that there's still a squib makes me wonder if I've missed something massive in the series of if you've moved to make Pure Bloods truly evil. It's a nice touch either way. And eeep, was that Draco flirting? I sure hope so. Your face for Seraphine is exactly how I imagined, though with a neck not quite as long.

Chapter 13: crimson shirt = skirt // pulls here away = pulls her away // They are hear = they are here // I wonder if the daughter of Death Eaters would be allowed to be an auror. Could she be trusted? Keeping the actual lines from the book? film? (can't remember if it was film or both) made me positively giddy. So sassy~ Your addition to it is even better! Looking at the outfit for Eleanor, I think I've realized why I like her so much: we are quite alike.

I certainly hope you'll continue this because I absolutely cannot wait to read more! Keep an eye on your messages/comments as winners will be announced soon