When Fire Meets Ice: The Lovers - Comments

@ dawn of light
Your comment couldn't have come at a better time. I stopped writing this when I started NaNo, and I haven't had a chance to think about starting it up again or the inspiration. I love that you think this is organized considering I never had a plan for it at all :)! Hopefully I can get back to writing this weekend.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

It took me ages to get to the commenting part of my Candy Bowl Giveaway you participated in, but behold it’s finally here!

When I read the summary, I had so many thoughts going through my head. I've always had a fascination towards the idea related to shapeshifters. This gave me some hype

She, however, liked to admire this chaos swirled into a perfect order. This line gives the reader a nice glimpse of her life and in my eyes, very powerful.

Lani is so special. To me, you developed her very clearly. I do like how badass she is. I KINDA RELATE TO HER IN A WAY I love her relationship with Jura! Sisters are usually great to write about and by reading this, I feel like you had a good time writing these chapters. Very nice and realistic!!!!!!

Damocles yes
The romance in me is firing up with these two
YES YES YES
I KINDA LOVE DAMOCLES

I love and envy the details you put into your story. It's not dull but full of life. You’ve written this in a very organized way. I really liked how smooth it was, as well.

Your writing is fresh, clean and without a doubt talented. You have a nice piece on your hands. Thank you for recommending this story to me!

I'm so sorry this comment was so late

@ Lady Nikki Nightmare

I'll try to once I get some more time on my hands.

@ TheGoodMadame
It's better late than never. Thank you for the comment. I'm glad you liked it, and seriously come back anytime to catch up if you want. I'm not going to be updating until December probably just because of NaNoWriMo

Here's your Reese's Cup! Sorry for it being so late.

Layout: The layout for this story was gorgeous. I could immediately tell the general theme and that this would have something to do with the mystical world. It's put together beautifully and it's aesthetically pleasing.

Story - Chapter 1: I didn't read very far since my time is limited on the computer but I loved the way the paragraphs flowed, the description of the characters, and the grammar usage for the sentences. It made it an easy read, and although these specific types of stories aren't usually my cup of tea I really enjoyed it. I wish I could've read more of the story.

Here's your Reese's Cup! Sorry for it being so late.

Layout: The layout for this story was gorgeous. I could immediately tell the general theme and that this would have something to do with the mystical world. It's put together beautifully and it's aesthetically pleasing.

Story - Chapter 1: I didn't read very far since my time is limited on the computer but I loved the way the paragraphs flowed, the description of the characters, and the grammar usage for the sentences. It made it an easy read, and although these specific types of stories aren't usually my cup of tea I really enjoyed it. I wish I could've read more of the story.

@ arkham knight.
I actually plan on subbmitting it eventually to publishers, so it's good to hear that my dragons are good enough for print :) Thank you for commenting, I appreciate the kind words, and that your favorite line is pretty much my favorite thing about Leilani's character.

Can I just start off by saying that your summary is just awesome. It's really epic and gives you the bit of information you'll need without being bogged down with it.

Right away you start off with some amazing imagery. I love how you describe her as having "diamond eyes" and "glassy wings". Those just really stand out to me and I'm able to imagine it perfectly! Then, again, you describe the sound of the dragons' wings as thundering and it's so awesome because that makes me think about how a storm is coming and then that makes me think that shit's about to get real.

You really are able to capture the image of the surroundings and your writing makes it incredibly beautiful and poetic. Imagery is definitely one of your strong suits because I can just see everything so clearly. I think my favorite line would have to be "She, however, liked to admire this chaos swirled into a perfect order." I love the irony of having orderly chaos, but that's just me.

You're doing such an amazing job with this and I really hope that you continue on with it! I feel like this could definitely be a novel if you actually put it to paper and sent it to publishers. Great job with this!

@ pallid
Thank you for reading and commenting . I'm actually behind in writing this. I owe two chapters to the story now. So take your time reading. I'm glad you picked up on Leilani and Jura's relationship. It's seriously my favorite thing to write.

@ Carpe Diem !
No worries about the language . The Choir is hard to explain, but I'm glad you liked it. I can't wait go dive more into the dragon world since it's divided with the human world now. I love that you put my dragons in the same sentence as angels I will try to get the last two updates I owe this story up by Sunday.

Holy fuck this layout. Sorry for my language but there is no other way to express how amazing it is. Good god.

Obviously my candy bowl brought me here but there are about a million things I already love about this story. First and foremost: dragons. I've been obsessed with dragons ever since I was little and the variety and amazing detail in which you discuss the kinds and what they look like is enough to make anyone stop and read. I absolutely love the way you use the description for the dragons and their types, and I find it fascinating that they have 'choirs' kind of like angels.

Like I stated a moment ago, your description is amazing. It isn't overdone and you don't use a bunch of cliches to describe what's happening. You use the perfect amount of simplicity and beauty together so that I can actually picture the dragons coming out of the ground or seeing thunderheads in the distance and all of those things. Most people really can't do that, especially without avoiding cliches and you do a swell job.

My favorite thing is the originality about this. You breathe so much life right into the story that it just feels like there really is nothing else like it. I've read countless books about dragons and sometimes they get to be repetitive, but yours isn't. It's entirely something of it's own and the world that you're creating here is amazing with the separate lands for the dragons, with the different characters and the mythology of dragons being able to temporarily go into human form. It's insanely good and I'm going to read every word of this that you write ever.

To start off, like most comments because you deserve it, the layout is gorgeous. It's easy to read, elegant and compliments the tone of the story fantastically. The colors are so pleasing and almost reeling, definitely a sure way to hook readers just by the first glance. And for the summary, it's so well-written! I love well-written fantasy and I especially love dragons, but bonus: unique dragons and I'm in love. Combining the layout as it is and the summary alone, you have something intriguing right off the bat.

And for the content, your imagery and detailing is amazing, it was like watching a movie and I was entirely mesmerized. You portray emotions so beautifully, it was like being the character rather than reading about them, and I love the old-fashioned dialogue and classic writing style. It still has a sense of uniqueness, but there's this familiar tone in it that settles a reader into a comfortable fantasy--something we know but something entirely new at the same time.

THE SASS, LEILANI. I was probably laughing at more things than I should have been, but that is some intense sass and I love it. I also love her sister in a strange way, and I love their relationship though it's obviously complicated with high-running emotions. Also, I'm not entirely sure how I feel about Damocles. He seems like he has potential to either be a great character later on or a total jerk haha.

I wish I had more time to read it all! I'll definitely be back to finish this because I'm so fascinated with this world you've built and these characters you've brought to life. You have something beautifully fantastic in the makings and I'm painfully curious so I'll definitely be back.

@ JamieJo
Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like it so far. My goal is a chapter a week on Friday, but I have been known to have to play catch up.

WOW! This is amazing! Everything about it pulls me in and I am dying to read more!!

Love your layout! Your story summary is greatly written and I very much enjoy how you describe what's going on.

Love your layout! Your story summary is greatly written and I very much enjoy how you describe what's going on.

@ Lady Nikki Nightmare
It would be and it's cool :)

Wouldn't it be great if we could delete double posts instead of apologizing for them? (That's my way of saying, sorry for the double post :D)

@ The Alpha's Angel
Thank you :) I'm glad you like the story so far! There's a lot more to come.

I absolutely love your layout... it's gorgeous and really grabs the readers attention. I love the world you've created so far, your detail is amazing and really creates the image as you read through each chapter, which is something that I love in a story. Everything flows great and I didn't spot any mistakes as I read!