I love this... I'm a fan of cliche (don't tell no one) and this was funny! You did this really well and it's just awesome. Stupid damn bike killing vibe!
Oh my god, I love this cliché so much. I feel like I say that every time I read a story entered in the cliché contest BUT THEY’RE ALL SO GOOD.
That first line is killer, comparing something to Twilight is always a solid way to start off a story.
I enjoy the fact that Kerian is a stereotypical nerdy, lost girl and has the stereotypical thought process, it’s a fantastic touch. And then you have Harry who thinks everyone should know who he is. So great. And I like how even though I can tell you were emulating how the cliché stories are written, you still wrote it well and it all flowed together really nicely. I love how much thought you put into making it as cliché as possible.
AND THEN THE BIKE KILLING THE VIBE OH MY GOD. I love this so much I can’t even handle it Fantastic job, lovely!