There Is Beauty in Magic - Comments

@ pocahontas.
Thank you
I'll keep my eyes open xo

Your summary is sweet and short, which is a great way to bring in readers. As is your layout. Simple, but with a custom banner that's story-specific. I love it~

Your first chapter is just about perfect in length - not to short, not too long, but lovely enough that I'm left wishing it was too long. Freya is such a clever name for a Potter OC and matches up so well with Oliver. I did notice that you mixed a bunch of things to create a good plot where younger characters and older characters attended Hogwarts at the same time. This is something I love because it can bring the enjoyment of the Yule Ball and Oliver Wood to people who might not be as familiar with Harry Potter as some of us. I do wish there would have been more details in the Yule Ball part, though.

Reading the chapter through Oliver's eyes was a nice touch. It seemed much more personal than Freya's chapter, because typically girls are thought to be unsure of themselves and guys are thought to be confident. The comparison to a baby giraffe was so cute. And who doesn't love a little Weasley Twin scene? Overall this was a good read & the perfect amount of fluff for the holidays! Keep an eye on your comments/messages as winners will be announced soon xo

There were a two mistakes, but nothing that can't be fixed quite fast!
Summary: aswell should be as well
One: glanced over at violet. should be glanced over at Violet.

@ dawn of light
Thank you :) I'm glad you liked it... awkward sentences is something that I'm also trying to work on, when I'm writing and in the zone everything seems to fit together nicely lol.

It took me ages to get to the commenting part of my Hawaiian Giveaway you participated in, but behold it’s finally here!

You gave me a Christmas-feel story!!!!!! I love you for that Christmas is by far my favorite holiday. With that being said, it's safe to say that you captured the essence of the season perfectly. It's amazing how I felt the weather through your writing. I barely experience low temperatures #hawaiiproblems but I just felt shivers while reading this.

Hahahahaha Malfoy. I can imagine his hair getting messed up with snow that made me laugh so hard just thinking about it.

When you wrote about Freya catching her attention on Oliver, I’d love it if you wrote about the things she noticed about him. Maybe the way he arches his head to the side or the way he smiles? (Urgh, the romance in me is taking over) but I honestly loved this little scene because Freya can't help but stare at Oliver

DAMN MALFOY HAHAHAHAHAH. THAT KID

Oliver ahhhh sweet sweet Oliver I could just imagine Oliver’s POV in this scene already. He would be like “omgomgomgomg yay.”

THEY ARE SO CUTE. WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO ME, MANDY?!?!? wow, I need to chill but I can't because of this cuteness overload.

AYE, I’M SO GLAD WE HAVE OLI’S POV ON THE NEXT CHAPTER I was so curious of his thoughts throughout the first chapter!

He's so precious and delicate omg can we just appreciate the fact that he compared himself to a baby giraffe?!?!?! he's adorable, just like one

THEY ARE PERFECT

I honestly love how you had two perspectives from our couple here. I liked that small touch you added. Your layout is simple and matches quite well with the theme. Thank you for recommending this to me!

Although there were some awkward sentences (we've all been there. I'm always trying to fix that habit of mine), I thought this was an easy read. I loved the concept you had and the main idea of this small romance emerging. It was definitely sweet and right to the point.

@ cis.
Thank you :)

Immediately this story made me feel all Christmas-y. I can just picture the way the Great Hall looks with the snow and the decorations and I think it sets the scene really well.

I can already tell that this story is already very cute and sweet - you’ve captured the emotion and the setting well to portray a romance story, which fits nicely. Freya is a very realistic and relatable character - she’s awkward, a little bit clumsy and she has trouble talking to her crush as most teenage girls might have. It draws the reader in more when they can relate to the character, and I’m drawn in because I share a few traits with Freya. (Plus I love Oliver Wood so that’s always a plus ).

I like how you described Oliver as her ‘kryptonite’. It’s a really interesting analogy that I don’t actually think I’ve seen before in story, or at least rarely. It adds a nice touch to Freya’s awkward character. I also like the relationship between Violet and Freya, which is a very realistic depiction of a friendship between teenage girls. In a way, it reminds me of me and my own friends.

This one-shot was incredibly sweet and whilst it was cliché, the clichés worked really well. The only tip I have is that maybe add more descriptions within the sentences - sometimes they can read a little blandly and I think more descriptors would grab the readers attention.

I really enjoyed this, and I also think Oliver Wood is underrated

p.s. i’m sorry this giveaway comment was late!

@ starfire.
Thank you
I agree that Oliver is underrated!

THIS IS SO CUTE! I always loved Oliver and I feel like he's really underrated when it comes to HP fan fiction. I loved how fluffy and romantic this was, and also your layout is gorgeous.