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  • solo sunrise

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    @ iron giant!
    Thank you! I hope you like the rest!
    July 9th, 2016 at 06:32am
  • A siren

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    FUCK, this is so good. I'm on a mission to read this whole thing. The first chapter was fantastic; I love how you include information about the surrounding area and towns. I can never seem to work that in to my stories. I love it. Fuck. Love.
    July 9th, 2016 at 02:05am
  • solo sunrise

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    @ lungsmoke
    Facepalm I am so sorry for all of the typos in the most recent updates, because I only tend to update things when I'm sleep-deprived.
    May 2nd, 2016 at 02:33am
  • oh bear

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    God, I was reading this and I had to stop and relax my shoulders because I was getting so tense. XD

    One thing I like about this story is that Ask annoys the fuck out of me, especially when he's SO FREAKING STUBBORN ABOUT HIS AGE, LIKE GODDAMN DUDE, GET WITH THE PROGRAMME. It really annoys me when it seems like he's purposefully being a smartass. But I think that means that the author's pretty good at what they do (i.e. writing and characterisation, LOL). I also really don't want to like Jason, even though he seems like a pretty swell dude so far (minus the cliffhanger; I just reread the last chapter. Ngl though I can't tell who has the gun?). I'm so irritated. I also feel like, with the sheer amount of sassy smartasses together something is going to blow up.

    Anyway, I'm super excited to read the rest of this story!! Each chapter never goes the way I expect it to and I'm already a fan of Garrett and Carina. Carina seems like a strong, no-nonsense female character, and I like that in stories.

    P.S. think you dropped an "h" here: it’s not like the mailbox has never been it.
    May 2nd, 2016 at 12:46am
  • solo sunrise

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    @ decay
    Ahh thank you so much! It needs editing, I know. I was afraid that the humor would be too corny. But thank you!
    January 17th, 2016 at 06:00am
  • raja sahara

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    holy moly I love this. Like I really really really love this. The way you write is just...ugh, I want your abilities!!! Everything just flows together so nicely, despite a few grammatical errors, but I was too entranced by this story to even properly notice.

    Garrett is so fucking funny. I love smart ass characters too. They're just so entertaining and you know they're actually good people on the inside. Carina seems really sweet. I want her and Garrett to get it because it seems like he likes her more than a friend ~~ Ask is TOO CUTE. I LOVE ASK. I was extremely confused by your summary 'cause I was like "wait...what on earth is Ask????" but that was instantly clarified in chapter one. I hope by the end of this story, Garrett, Carina, and Ask become the best of friends.

    I think my favorite part of this story was when Ask threw his literal hand at Garrett. I actually laughed out loud, that was too funny.

    You did really great with this! I love how different it is and how interesting you're making this, so pleaaaaaase, keep writing this. I'll probably continue reading it after this contest 'cause it's just too good.

    Great job!
    January 17th, 2016 at 03:46am