You did a fantastic job with the scenery and the small details in this. I am in love. I love this line, “Presuming that we are on the negative side of magnets, there will be no association between us,” because without a doubt, makes a nice impression to the audience.
I love that this is so simple – something a person would normally see everyday. You turned the normality of what we all experience into something breathtakingly beautiful. I especially loved the part where the lady gave the person an eye yet they was oblivious. I liked that small detail about that. I also love how you kept it genderless (does that make sense? – you didn’t say him or her and I liked that detail a lot).
The ending itself was a whole new level of brilliant, as if another story is waiting to happen. It’s so mysterious. I love it!
I love that this is so simple – something a person would normally see everyday. You turned the normality of what we all experience into something breathtakingly beautiful. I especially loved the part where the lady gave the person an eye yet they was oblivious. I liked that small detail about that. I also love how you kept it genderless (does that make sense? – you didn’t say him or her and I liked that detail a lot).
The ending itself was a whole new level of brilliant, as if another story is waiting to happen. It’s so mysterious. I love it!